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Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #120 on: February 06, 2007, 08:11:49 pm »
May I dabble in the drabbles abit more?  ;)


Sad streams by the river

He'd decided to make the trip one last time.
He wasn't sure he could handle being up there alone ..
Especially at this time -
The memories cutting through him like a razor
The nightmares infecting the remnants of his sanity.
Yet ..
He'd decided to make one more trip..

He sat on a rock by the river, his head in his hands..
They'd camped here for years, at least once a year.
He recalled the days of their youth -
How they'd sat around by the fire on this very spot
How they'd overindulged on the whiskey
How he'd watch Jack bathing in the river,
His body glistening in the sun, breathtaking, beautiful..
How they'd made love till they were worn
Giddy and exhausted from their passion ..

He wiped the streams of tears leaking from his swollen eyes,
A sob escaped his throat, his shoulders trembled.
Darkness descended upon the mountain,
The sound of crickets chirping and
The soothing music of the flowing river filled the air.
He sat still on that rock by the river,
A single candle burning by his side
His head still in his hands, shivering from the cold ..

He reached into the old canvas bag beside his feet
And pulled out the stained blue denim shirt.
He held it to his lips, then he managed to speak..
"Lil' darlin, I'm sorry I couldn't bring ya up here like ya wanted..
What did ya go and do that for? Leaving me like this?
I know you were angry with me, I know I let you down..
If yer trying to punish me ..  well, yer succeedin'..
You know yer all I got ..
What did ya go and do that for, Jack? Huh? "
His lips trembled, fresh streams flowed ..

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Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #121 on: February 06, 2007, 09:13:16 pm »
     

        Very emotional Lucise, you are giving me goosebumps with the
talent that you display,                                              Janice



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Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #122 on: February 06, 2007, 10:20:34 pm »
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Jack was in the kitchen, pushing down the lever on the toaster, when Ennis came it. “What’re ya doin’?” he asked.

“Makin’ myself a late night snack of toast and peanut butter,” said Jack. He peered into the toaster, waiting for it to pop, and when it did, no toast came out.

......

Now, we know your Jack doesn't really need that toast for his peanut butter, Leslie!   ;)  Your guys always make me smile!


May I dabble in the drabbles abit more?  ;)

Sad streams by the river

~303 words


From giddy to heartbreaking ... I'm really feeling his anguish.  Yes, please keep dabbling!

Thanks again, Marie
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The worst loneliness is not to be comfortable with yourself.    ~~~~~~~~~ Mark Twain

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Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #123 on: February 06, 2007, 11:28:33 pm »

   "  Thats the last of it Jack."
   "  Did you get my pot.."
   "  Your pot?..we smoked it"
   "  Not that pot."
   "  My pot pot!"
   "  What pot pot?"
   "  The pot i grow the pot in."
   "  Ya brung that with ya?"
   "  Yep"
   "  What in gods name for Jack fuckin Twist?"
   "  jus in case Lureen might find it."
   "  So ya grow yer own pot, in a pot?"
   "  Yeah ,,what about it."
   "  Heloise says you have to match the size of the plant to the
      size ah the pot,,,!  So i bought this big ole clay pot..  dang,
      im hoping this dam pot  gits as big as the pot i put it in".



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Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #124 on: February 07, 2007, 01:44:04 am »
   "  Thats the last of it Jack."
   "  Did you get my pot.."
   "  Your pot?..we smoked it"
   "  Not that pot."
   "  My pot pot!"
   "  What pot pot?"
   "  The pot i grow the pot in."
   "  Ya brung that with ya?"
   "  Yep"
   "  What in gods name for Jack fuckin Twist?"
   "  jus in case Lureen might find it."
   "  So ya grow yer own pot, in a pot?"
   "  Yeah ,,what about it."
   "  Heloise says you have to match the size of the plant to the
      size ah the pot,,,!  So i bought this big ole clay pot..  dang,
      im hoping this dam pot  gits as big as the pot i put it in".

LOL   I'm laughing so hard, I just sprayed water all over my keyboard.   LOL
That is the funniest thing I've ever read in my life.   LOL   
Okay, I'm still laughing.  Hard to laugh and type at the same time.    ;)   hehehe   

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Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #125 on: February 07, 2007, 04:50:19 am »
LOL   I'm laughing so hard, I just sprayed water all over my keyboard.   LOL
That is the funniest thing I've ever read in my life.   LOL   
Okay, I'm still laughing.  Hard to laugh and type at the same time.    ;)   hehehe   

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Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #126 on: February 07, 2007, 05:37:34 am »
May I dabble in the drabbles abit more?  ;)

Sad streams by the river

What did ya go and do that for, Jack? Huh? "
His lips trembled, fresh streams flowed ..
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You  have me crying. And it's too early in the morning for this. Hand me kleenex, please!

 
   "  Heloise says you have to match the size of the plant to the
      size ah the pot,,,!  So i bought this big ole clay pot..  dang,
      im hoping this dam pot  gits as big as the pot i put it in".

LOL, there goes Heloise again! You know, she'd right about that little fact!

This a lot of fun. Sorry I didn't have time to participate yesterday, but it's just as fun to see what everyone else is up to!
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The sun breaks each day with shines,
Hither awhile, then whither back--
It is life that people lack.
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Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #127 on: February 07, 2007, 06:55:09 am »
Good morning everyone!

For today's drabbles, mariez suggested the prompts.

  • Dripping faucet/spigot
  • Perfume
  • Eyeglasses

Have fun, everyone, and thanks Marie for the suggestion!

Leslie
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« Reply #128 on: February 07, 2007, 09:38:07 am »
Oh, we made the Bettermost news! If you look on the home page of the forum, in the banner at the top, there's a link to this thread! Maybe some new folks will come and join us for the fest!

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Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #129 on: February 07, 2007, 09:45:54 am »
   "  Thats the last of it Jack."
   "  Did you get my pot.."
   "  Your pot?..we smoked it"
   "  Not that pot."
   "  My pot pot!"
   "  What pot pot?"
   "  The pot i grow the pot in."
   "  Ya brung that with ya?"
   "  Yep"
   "  What in gods name for Jack fuckin Twist?"
   "  jus in case Lureen might find it."
   "  So ya grow yer own pot, in a pot?"
   "  Yeah ,,what about it."
   "  Heloise says you have to match the size of the plant to the
      size ah the pot,,,!  So i bought this big ole clay pot..  dang,
      im hoping this dam pot  gits as big as the pot i put it in".

LMAO  You are too funny janice!  I cant wait to see what you come up with today. 

Good morning everyone!

For today's drabbles, mariez suggested the prompts.

  • Dripping faucet/spigot
  • Perfume
  • Eyeglasses

Have fun, everyone, and thanks Marie for the suggestion!

Leslie

I like the prompts you picked today Marie!  I might even try to write a drabble myself.