Author Topic: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!  (Read 368519 times)

Offline mariez

  • BetterMost Supporter!
  • BetterMost 1000+ Posts Club
  • *****
  • Posts: 4,084
  • "you bet"
Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #60 on: February 02, 2007, 02:06:09 pm »
Oh, Leslie.  Any mention of Hal really gets to me - but this was just . . .  oh, my.  :'(

Thanks.

Marie
The measure of a country's greatness is its ability to retain compassion in times of crisis         ~~~~~~~~~Thurgood Marshall

The worst loneliness is not to be comfortable with yourself.    ~~~~~~~~~ Mark Twain

Offline ifyoucantfixit

  • BetterMost 5000+ Posts Club
  • *******
  • Posts: 8,049
Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #61 on: February 02, 2007, 02:26:18 pm »


       Jack was tired this morning, he didnt often feel so low and tired.   He just slumped down,
and let his head rest on his forarms.  Maybe ill just rest my eyes.  Before he knew it he was
asleep..He could hear the sound of the clock ticking in the background, and it gave him a
drone to send him farther and farther into sleep..  He was laying close to the fire, and felt
warm and cozy.   tick tick, tick. it was coming closer and closer and closer...Jack, Jack Twist.
This is no place to take a nap...
       It was Mrs Hammermeir, and she slapped him on the shoulder with her magazine,,,and
he saw the beautiful pair of red spiked heels as he opened his eyes....So the Devil really
does wear Prada..



     Beautiful mind

Scott6373

  • Guest
Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #62 on: February 02, 2007, 02:31:05 pm »
That's funny Janice  ;D

Offline haunted_by_bbm

  • Brokeback Mountain Resident
  • ****
  • Posts: 196
  • "didn't know we was gonna get into this again..."
    • Panels of the Dream: Brokeback Mountain Stories
Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #63 on: February 02, 2007, 03:37:47 pm »
"No fire" - 
Aguirre said and now he freezes his ass off on the mountain.
Fire  -
warm and cozy, with Ennis sitting across him, drinking, sharing his sad story
Fire  -
dies down, brings Ennis to him
Fire -
of passion, Ennis's and his
Camp fires -
countless
Fire -
BBQ with Lureen, the fire not half as warm as on a cold mountain
Fire -
adding fuel to the fire of short leashes and coffepot travels
Fire -
in a crematory, finally consuming him whole

Word count 79

Damn, that sent a shiver!  Incredible imagery.

C*
"The room stank of semen and smoke and sweat and whiskey, of old carpet and sour hay, saddle leather, shit and cheap soap.  Ennis lay spread-eagled, spent and wet, breathing deep, still half tumescent, Jack blowing forceful cigarette clouds like whale spouts..." – Annie Proulx

Offline haunted_by_bbm

  • Brokeback Mountain Resident
  • ****
  • Posts: 196
  • "didn't know we was gonna get into this again..."
    • Panels of the Dream: Brokeback Mountain Stories
Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #64 on: February 02, 2007, 03:47:58 pm »

He regarded Lureen’s shoe lying by his foot:  Pointed toe, high heel pumps.  How could she wear those he though.  He let his toe catch the shoe.  He slipped his man’s foot inside the tiny shoe.  He turned his foot back and forth in admiration of the look he achieved.

“Jesus Christ…I’m really queer.” 


186 words

omg   I'm laughing so hard.   Nice one.   ;)

C*
"The room stank of semen and smoke and sweat and whiskey, of old carpet and sour hay, saddle leather, shit and cheap soap.  Ennis lay spread-eagled, spent and wet, breathing deep, still half tumescent, Jack blowing forceful cigarette clouds like whale spouts..." – Annie Proulx

Offline Lumière

  • BetterMost Supporter!
  • BetterMost 5000+ Posts Club
  • *****
  • Posts: 9,283
Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #65 on: February 02, 2007, 03:52:13 pm »
This is based on a little poem I wrote a while back .. called:


Through a boy's eyes


He lay there all through the night
Lifeless and sagging in that little ditch.
Dried blood stuck to his many wounds
It was like a bad dream, a horrid sight ..

A little boy barely passed the age of nine
Stood there and took in the sight, the stench.
He felt his old man's hand grip his neck
His heart raced, as chills descended his spine.

That little boy grew up to be a young man
Yet some nights when he'd shut his eyes to sleep
He'd see that shell of a body decaying in the ditch
Abandoned and forgotten on that barren piece of land.

He didn't think he'd ever forget what his old man had said:
"Son, see the ol' fool lying there?  He was a disgustin' queer ..
Destined for hell fire .. his death is less painful than what awaits him .."
Ennis shuddered as he recalled the words, tears flowing quietly as he lay in bed ..




Scott6373

  • Guest
Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #66 on: February 02, 2007, 03:56:09 pm »
That's lovely Lucise...you also had a photo with the same name that broke my heart.

Offline Lumière

  • BetterMost Supporter!
  • BetterMost 5000+ Posts Club
  • *****
  • Posts: 9,283
Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #67 on: February 02, 2007, 05:10:27 pm »
That's lovely Lucise...you also had a photo with the same name that broke my heart.

Cheers Scott .. here is the pic..  :)



Offline Bigheart

  • BetterMost 1000+ Posts Club
  • ******
  • Posts: 1,609
Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #68 on: February 02, 2007, 05:38:39 pm »
Aww Milli ~ the poem and the pic are breaking my heart  :'(  But still so beautiful though.....*sigh*

 :-*

Offline ifyoucantfixit

  • BetterMost 5000+ Posts Club
  • *******
  • Posts: 8,049
Re: The Bettermost Drabblefest: Please Join In!
« Reply #69 on: February 02, 2007, 06:44:47 pm »
"No fire" - 
Aguirre said and now he freezes his ass off on the mountain.
Fire  -
warm and cozy, with Ennis sitting across him, drinking, sharing his sad story
Fire  -
dies down, brings Ennis to him
Fire -
of passion, Ennis's and his
Camp fires -
countless
Fire -
BBQ with Lureen, the fire not half as warm as on a cold mountain
Fire -
adding fuel to the fire of short leashes and coffepot travels
Fire -
in a crematory, finally consuming him whole


Word count 79

                     Man oh man...............shocking...sad................



     Beautiful mind