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Introducing the "Jack with Ennis" Fan Fic Game - the BetterMost Edition
loneleeb3:
--- Quote ---Love you Jack. If I could hold you in my arms right now, you'd know that.”,
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Oh Susie, thats a beautiful story!
Got tears of my own now.
mariez:
Oh, wow - these are just great. I can see that this thread is going to be addictive!
Thanks for sharing - I'm looking foward to more. :)
Marie
malina:
This is thanks to Daphne and Susie. I was nostalgically reading over old threads on IMDB following our mass exodus. And I came upon Daphne's beautiful “Private Moments” thread, and Susie's response, the last before a string of 'deletes'. The idea of 'Private Moments' is... what do we wish they had each been able to see the other do, and what do we wish could have happened. Susie said: “I wish Ennis had swiveled around and held Jack face to face”.
And... I feel out of practice and rusty...
It always tugged at Jack's heart when Ennis left. He knew it was just for the night, and that they couldn't leave them damn sheep alone on the mountain with the coyotes, more greedy than ever now that fall was approaching. Still, every time Jack watched Ennis ride off in the dusk on Cigar Butt, that little edge of fear twisted inside him... thinkin', what if this is the night Ennis changes his mind? What if somethin' happens to him up there and he don't come back down at all? Foolish thoughts, and Jack tried to keep on top a them ... still, always hard ta see Ennis leavin', even just for the night.
This night in August was different. Tired from a full day of wrasslin' those woolies around, not to mention wrasslin' with his man, Jack felt every muscle in his body relax as he stared dreaming at the fire. He breathed in smoke an' mountain air and felt his eyes close to the sounds of Ennis gatherin' up stuff preparin' to go. This night, didn't even feel bad that Ennis was goin. He'd be on the same mountain, after all. Brokeback joined them, Jack thought, half dozing. Never really apart, both a them on Brokeback. Jack stood, sleepin' on his feet like a horse, feeling that whole mountain as part of his body and his heart. Ennis wasn't really leavin', even when he rode off.
Eyes still closed, Jack felt strong arms come around him from behind, like to confirm his thoughts. He felt Ennis's breath on his shoulder and humming his ear. He felt Ennis rock him and whisper a bit, leaned against the steady heartbeat, felt the lonely place inside him filled for good. Never really apart, he thought again, thinkin' he'd say the words out loud but next second forgetting to. Felt like Ennis heard him in any case.
Ennis mumbled 'gotta go', his hand clutching Jack's coat one final time as if not wantin' to pull away. He turned slightly, looked at Jack's face in the dozy firelight, and all his resolve was gone. Facing Jack, seeing Jack's blue eyes open sleepily and search his face, Ennis pulled him close again, face to face this time, feeling Jack's arms close around him, too, and next second, Jack's slightly parted lips warm against his own. Never really apart, Ennis thought, feelin' like the mountain could stretch out into all of time and space an' keep on being home.
malina:
--- Quote from: Susiebell on June 08, 2007, 05:23:14 am ---
“Love you Jack. If I could hold you in my arms right now, you'd know that.”, he ran his thumb over the old carving, hearing Jack's voice, hardly a whisper, drifting into his mind, the words “S’alright, s’alright”, comforting him; “I Gotta go”, he said quietly, wiping away a few stray tears and climbing back into the saddle; Jack Twist was right, no matter where they were, in this life or the next, they would always be together.
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Susie... so beautiful... :'(
malina:
--- Quote from: Toycoon on June 07, 2007, 11:25:23 pm ---He never was much for dancing, not much rhythm, but Ennis sure did like to watch Jack, shaking his butt and woopin' around while drinkin', listening to the transistor and sitting on the porch at Don Rowe's cabin under the full moon.
When Sam Cook came on over the radio, it was as though Jack had been electrocuted because he sprung up, yanked Ennis out of his chair and yelled, " This is my favorite song! "
Ennis was thankful it was a slow number because it gave him a chance to rub his smooth chest against Jack's hairy chest and find the rhythm that a full moon can coax out of a man.
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Toycoon... perfect. I remember a version of this from long ago, I think.. I don't know if you've changed it or not, but the way it is right now is... perfect like a full moon is perfect!
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