Author Topic: Good Old Boy to I learned about Women from 'Er. by twistedude.  (Read 11691 times)

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Re: "Good Old Boy" ; "Prequel: Sentimental Education"
« Reply #10 on: May 18, 2006, 03:44:49 pm »
Did you see my picture of "The Chariot of Apollo," by Redon (first post in this thread)?

Oh, so this is the picture in the post card.  I get it now.  Thanks!

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Re: "Good Old Boy" ; "Prequel: Sentimental Education"
« Reply #11 on: May 19, 2006, 04:42:09 pm »
Hi Julie,

I enjoyed the new story.  I liked hearing about Jack as a younger in-experienced boy learning and acting a lot younger than when we see him the next summer in 1963 when BBM officially begins.  Again, I like stories that 'expand' on BBM.  You did a great job.  And the visuals of the burning sheep will haunt me for a while now.  Yuck!   :D

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I finally got the third story straightened out, and made ALL the changes i wanted, including calling it a sequel (it's a sequel to the movie and my second stiory), as several people suggested.

                               "Be Nice, Wouldn't It?"

                      http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2948535/1/
« Last Edit: June 03, 2006, 11:44:54 pm by julie01 »
"We're each of us alone, to be sure. What can you do but hold your hand out in the dark?" --"Nine Lives," by Ursula K. Le Guin, from The Wind's Twelve Quarters

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I thought of the MMMs as an innocuous design. Planned, are you kidding? Leslie started "A Love Born From Steel" as a one-shot story...who plans...non-existant people just start attacking you! In the middle of talking about Korean pottery..in a psychology group, and I'm sure i won't be able to sit through "United 93" or "The Da Vinci Code" without these criters coming at me..

« Last Edit: May 20, 2006, 03:41:26 pm by julie01 »
"We're each of us alone, to be sure. What can you do but hold your hand out in the dark?" --"Nine Lives," by Ursula K. Le Guin, from The Wind's Twelve Quarters

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Julie,

This is another well done story!  A few things I want to comment on:

1.   About “Jack can lie really good” and “probably got that from his mother”, how very true it is.  I love how Jack and Mrs. Twist told those sad and well intentioned lies, and feel sad for the fact that they had to at the same time.
2.   Denver – Duh, I didn’t realize why you had Jim and Jacob in Denver in the last story. 
3.   The Jewish thing with the hand – This is a question.  Is this a well known thing in America, in another word will a person like Ennis with all the traveling he had done know this? Sorry for my ignorance on American culture here.  I actually never notice this from my Jewish friends.  Only came to know this after watched The Sex and The City.
4.   Well, this should not come as a surprise for you  :). I am having trouble with the last 4 paragraphs.  Guess I don’t mind the direction they are going, just have issue with the speed  :).  I can see Ennis and Jim making connection through their love for Jack, but the move was too sudden for me, particularly from Ennis, who was still grieving for Jack’s death, and always needed delicate handling (to warm up).  But again that’s just me.  We all read stories with our own baggage.

Will you ever consider doing an Ennis/Jack story?

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I POSTED THIS!

Jenny: As far as "Jewish hands" are concerned, Ennis does NOT say anything about Jewish, the narrator does; Ennis just remarks that he "does what he's sayin'" I'm Jewish, and many friends and relatives talk with their hands, and many don't. My best freind was once told by a friend that she was going to shut her up by tying her hands together!

 Some say too fast; some say too slow. I am NOT going to make any gereralizations about unattached gay men; I got in enough trouble generalizing about Jews talking with their hands, sometimes (only SOMETIMES, I said, too!).

I REALLY had to make some changes, though, when I discovered that not John Wesley, but St. Augustine, had originally said "the outward and visable sign of an inward and spiritual grace," and I've made some needed changes to the dialogue and action around it.

Far as I'm concerned, the conversation could go on all night...



« Last Edit: May 22, 2006, 03:17:13 pm by julie01 »
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New stiory, but there's no space for the title! Guess I'll post it elsewhere, too.

                         "A Day in  Life,"  a sequel (soirt of) to "Good Old Boy"

                        http://www.fanfiction/s/2963268/1/

   A high school senior has a long, busy and informative day. Name's Bobby Twist.
CAUTION: this story contains explicit heterosexual content, which might not be suitable for all viewers. HEE!

« Last Edit: July 16, 2006, 03:56:00 am by julie01 »
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My only Jack-and-Ennis story, kinda spooky, kinda sad, edited to put a little cheer at the end.

                          Just Bones

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         I feel, as many of you do, that this movie is a true tragedy, in the most exalted sense: it fills us with sorrow and pity, and teaches at the same time.
« Last Edit: June 03, 2006, 11:53:21 pm by julie01 »
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New story:   The Clothes that You Once Wore

           http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2998444/1/

This is the sequel to "Good Old Boy," and "A Day in the Life." Some of you may find it Beyond Wrong. I disagree. It's still for Martha, Kevin and Michaela, who won't even know it exists. Long drives can be lonely...Or educational.

This is the stiory i posted yesterday and then took down because I thought some of the writing was bad. When a reader told me he objected to it on moral and Brokeback taboo grounds, I immediately corrected some of the writijng, and reposted it. Nothing like a little opposition to start a riot...


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Jack Twist's little boy, name of Bobby
Chose revenge as his new favorite hobby.
The slashistas were grossed
When he fucked his dad's ghost
After killing old Roy in the lobby.
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(actually, he didn't really like killing the guy, and it weas in the library, but it's still a good limrick.
 
« Last Edit: July 23, 2006, 11:55:27 pm by twistedude »
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Re: Good Old Boy to I learned about Women from 'Er. by twistedude.
« Reply #19 on: August 15, 2006, 08:52:19 pm »
I Learned About Women from 'Er.

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Jack comes back to see Lureen twice, the first time to impart some information, and the sedcond time, because he finds out it won't do her any good.
« Last Edit: August 15, 2006, 09:01:10 pm by twistedude »
"We're each of us alone, to be sure. What can you do but hold your hand out in the dark?" --"Nine Lives," by Ursula K. Le Guin, from The Wind's Twelve Quarters