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New Greenlea Tale: The Grey Girls
mariez:
SPOILERS
Well, that must've been a great nap, Louise!
“You shoulda. Don’t you know havin women lustin after you brings out my jealous streak?”
LOL! I love it! Now that's putting a positive spin on things! Those tapes and the walks must be working! I'm relieved to see Ellery in a better frame of mind - and I'm really glad the boys are getting some nice alone time.
But, speaking of women...Colson had me scratching my head a little with this remark:
...it was her idea ta boot me out in the first place...” Colson muttered
Well, he's right that it's not his fault the divorce didn't "cure" nothin, as he put it, but as for the "booting out" part- I wonder what he thinks Laura should've done :-\
Looks like Wes and Edna have some houseguests for at least the immediate future....and the fact that Katie Ann is already pouting after only 24 hours .....hmmmm.....my head is already spinning! LOL!
You've worked your magic again, Louise - thanks!
Marie
belbbmfan:
--- Quote from: louise van hine on March 16, 2008, 07:17:14 pm ---and here we are!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/261045.html "Chapter 17"
--- End quote ---
Great chapter Louise.
I'm glad Colson and Ellery get to spend some time together. It was good to hear Colson repeat the fact to Katie Ann and Pam that he had to get home to be with Ellery. They still are in 'we're moving in with daddy' mode and they are bound to be dissapointed about that.
And now with Laura gone, I do fear they will get back to 'avoiding' all the issues between them. Like what Colson said about the divorce. Marie raises a good question, what was Laura supposed to do?
I think we've only begon scratching the surface on this one.
Thanks Louise! :)
louisev:
Hope it isnt too late for an update for all of you hungry readers!
http://louisev.livejournal.com/261183.html 'Chapter 18'
MaineWriter:
Interesting revelation in the last paragraph.
Thanks, Louise.
L
mariez:
SPOILERS
...Come on now ya lunk, yer heavy when you ain’t fuckin.”
LOL! Have I told you lately how much I love Ellery? - and Colson, too. The "pillow talk" dialogue is brilliant. After all these stories, I still continue to be amazed by how natural and fresh and "real" the dialogue is.
Yes, I agree - that was an interesting revelation in the last paragraph - as well as sad and pathetic. Sigh. I hope the boys get some more rest because about the only thing I can be sure of is that they're going to need it.
Thanks,
Marie
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