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Author Topic: Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll  (Read 3154250 times)

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Re: Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
« Reply #9320 on: May 07, 2007, 07:21:23 pm »
I'm anxious to learn more about Adam- he's a bit of mystery man.  Looks like Colson has some fear that he may have "run off" with someone and it also appears that he was not married - at least not at the time of his "accident" (maybe not ever married -because Colson mentions that Adam didn't like the fact that he got married (sounds a bit like Ellery). The accident is also a mystery - no specifics at all given -maybe Adam's mother wasn't ever told specifics?  It looks like Colson has been getting any information he does have from Adam's mother. Adam's occupation also appears to be a little sketchy - at least Colson's knowledge of it. 

Now I've got a mystery inside of a mystery - I love that! 

Thanks,
Marie

P.S.  Have to say that no matter how many times I read these couple chapters I'm always amazed at how deftly and masterfully you handled this "first time" for Colson and Ellery.
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Re: Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
« Reply #9321 on: May 08, 2007, 04:46:15 am »
I myself was a little surprirsed that this, the second draft edit for the story, left little to do on the 'First time' and 'Gettin Fancy' chapters.

And yes here is where I start filling in back story that will make the Justin Worrell case far more coherent.  When I was first turning my story into a full-blown murder mystery originally I felt a little like 'stuffing a 7 pound rooster into a 2 quart jar' as Adam's momma might say, and I am now free to reconceptualize some of the sketchier details into a much more coherent frame.

and I have to say it is a big relief!
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Re: Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
« Reply #9322 on: May 08, 2007, 03:45:05 pm »
Hi everyone,

Two chapters for the friends' group!

Chapter 27. Dawn

http://louisev.livejournal.com/9425.html

Chapter 28. Plan B

http://louisev.livejournal.com/9629.html

Enjoy!

Leslie
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Re: Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
« Reply #9323 on: May 08, 2007, 07:00:34 pm »
Thanks, L & L, for the newest chapters. 

I'm curious about Adam's "mystery" job - did it involve real estate as Colson mentioned earlier. Why didn't his mother know about it - and what does Colson know? Or is Colson jumping to conclusions?  It's going to be very interesting to see this investigation unfold.

Marie
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Re: Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
« Reply #9324 on: May 09, 2007, 08:09:18 am »
I have sent the next three chapters to my Editor in Chief, but she is out of town for the next 8 hours or so, chapters will be up later.

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Re: Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
« Reply #9325 on: May 09, 2007, 10:37:37 pm »
Well, the Editor-in-Chief got waylaid by work, a conference call and then dinner, but she is finally back on the job!

Chapter 29. Complications

http://louisev.livejournal.com/9903.html

Enjoy!

Leslie
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Re: Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
« Reply #9326 on: May 09, 2007, 10:56:17 pm »
I am on a roll....

Chapter 30. The Assault

http://louisev.livejournal.com/10106.html

Enjoy!

Leslie
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Re: Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
« Reply #9327 on: May 09, 2007, 11:16:48 pm »
Last one for tonight....

Chapter 31. Hot Tempers

http://louisev.livejournal.com/10433.html

Enjoy!

L
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Re: Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
« Reply #9328 on: May 10, 2007, 01:20:26 am »
Quote from: MaineWriter on May 09, 2007, 11:16:48 pm
Last one for tonight....

Chapter 31. Hot Tempers

http://louisev.livejournal.com/10433.html

Enjoy!

L

I need a day off... I can't keep up!

Isn't that great though?  ;)


thanks for all the effort you put in rewriting this story.  :-*
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Re: Taking Chances, by E. L. Van Hine and L.H. Nicoll
« Reply #9329 on: May 10, 2007, 07:28:21 am »
Wow - all three after that long day  - thanks - you got my morning off to a great start!

Marie
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