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Offline Clyde-B

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Re: Hero by Clyde-B
« Reply #10 on: October 08, 2007, 08:30:40 pm »

     “Holy Sabbath!”  As Ennis read he laughed, he cried.
     Tiny print under Ennis’s address:  Found this postcard clipped to Jack’s last invoice.  It belongs with you.  Lureen
     On the front: the biggest cheese doodle yellow combine Ennis had ever seen.  A banner proclaiming ‘Newsome Farm Equipment’s Best Seller.’   Next to it, proud as punch, in his Resistol, leather jacket and bolo tie, smiled Jack Twist.  Ennis touched Jack’s cheek as though it were more than printed cardboard.
     On the back:  Cant hardly wait to see you again.  Still mad about August, but there’ll be more.  I’ll always be there.  Jack


      100 words






          Well, we’re back where we started at the very first line, we know what Jack decided and his postcard has been delivered, so my little story has come to its end.
          I hope you can forgive me for letting you think Jack was still alive, but if I did my job, I left Ennis willing to fight for those he loves, believing he just might win, knowing for sure that it was him and not somebody else that Jack loved, and thinking that maybe, just maybe, they really will be together again.

CB

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Re: Hero by Clyde-B
« Reply #11 on: October 08, 2007, 10:59:49 pm »
I loved this when I read it the first time, and feel just the same now. Wonderful story. Thank you so much for giving us the chance to read it like this.

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     ...if I did my job, I left Ennis willing to fight for those he loves, believing he just might win, knowing for sure that it was him and not somebody else that Jack loved, and thinking that maybe, just maybe, they really will be together again.
You did.
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Re: Hero by Clyde-B
« Reply #12 on: October 09, 2007, 07:58:45 am »
I loved this when I read it the first time, and feel just the same now. Wonderful story. Thank you so much for giving us the chance to read it like this.
You did.

Thanks Fern,

I love reading your stuff too!  I admire your nice smooth delivery.  Makes reading them like sliding downhill.

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Re: Hero by Clyde-B
« Reply #13 on: October 09, 2007, 09:06:27 pm »
Great to see this thread, Clyde!  The drabbles flow together beautifully. You and I see Ennis exactly the same way - and want the same things for him. 

Thanks,
Marie
The measure of a country's greatness is its ability to retain compassion in times of crisis         ~~~~~~~~~Thurgood Marshall

The worst loneliness is not to be comfortable with yourself.    ~~~~~~~~~ Mark Twain

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Re: Hero by Clyde-B
« Reply #14 on: October 10, 2007, 08:26:11 am »
Great to see this thread, Clyde!  The drabbles flow together beautifully. You and I see Ennis exactly the same way - and want the same things for him. 

Thanks,
Marie

Thanks Marie,
Your generous encouragement helps me to keep at it.

Ennis seems like an old friend, doesn't he?  Sometimes it's hard to believe he's not real.

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Re: Hero by Clyde-B
« Reply #15 on: October 10, 2007, 01:39:54 pm »
......Sometimes it's hard to believe he's not real.

SAY WHAT??   ;D

Marie
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Re: Hero by Clyde-B
« Reply #16 on: October 16, 2007, 12:49:06 am »
     “Holy Sabbath!”  As Ennis read he laughed, he cried.
     Tiny print under Ennis’s address:  Found this postcard clipped to Jack’s last invoice.  It belongs with you.  Lureen
     On the front: the biggest cheese doodle yellow combine Ennis had ever seen.  A banner proclaiming ‘Newsome Farm Equipment’s Best Seller.’   Next to it, proud as punch, in his Resistol, leather jacket and bolo tie, smiled Jack Twist.  Ennis touched Jack’s cheek as though it were more than printed cardboard.
     On the back:  Cant hardly wait to see you again.  Still mad about August, but there’ll be more.  I’ll always be there.  Jack


      100 words






          Well, we’re back where we started at the very first line, we know what Jack decided and his postcard has been delivered, so my little story has come to its end.
          I hope you can forgive me for letting you think Jack was still alive, but if I did my job, I left Ennis willing to fight for those he loves, believing he just might win, knowing for sure that it was him and not somebody else that Jack loved, and thinking that maybe, just maybe, they really will be together again.

CB

Clyde, how did I miss this?  I really have to look around more!  :laugh: Anyway, beautiful writing, my friend.  I loved reading every word!  I especially like this:

Ennis touched Jack’s cheek as though it were more than printed cardboard.
     On the back:  Cant hardly wait to see you again.  Still mad about August, but there’ll be more.  I’ll always be there.  Jack


I never believed Jack gave up on Ennis.  Thanks for this, Clyde!

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« Reply #17 on: November 07, 2007, 12:22:38 am »
Hi Clyde.  I just found this.  You are a master of the 100 word drabble, and this series is very compelling.  Thanks for posting your series here together.  And I hope that you come back to the BBM boards very soon.  I misss your presence and your posts.

Gary

I second this, Gary!  I really miss you, Clyde.  Come back to us!

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Re: Hero by Clyde-B
« Reply #18 on: November 08, 2007, 10:18:31 pm »
Evenin'.

Well, how are you, Clyde? Miss your posting here, and miss reading the Wylie/Ennis drabbles which I think of as chronicles.  Would sure like to read what has happened since Ennis woke up naked with that hangover and headed down to breakfast! 

Then again, here I am asking for an update when mine is way overdue!! Difference in being a reader and not the writer of the story. 

Hope to hear from you soon.

Thanks again. 

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« Reply #19 on: November 10, 2007, 02:31:34 pm »
I love your drabble series, Mr Clyde-B. Very original and compelling.
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