Let's write a Brokeback limerick! (How-to in first post)

[Katie77]

But the boys, unaware, pressed up closer......

[ifyoucantfixit]

                      But the boys, unaware, pressed up closer......
                      Ennis as always moved in like a bull dozer

[Lumière]

But the boys, unaware, pressed up closer......
Ennis as always moved in like a bull dozer
And brushed Jack's hat to the floor.

[ifyoucantfixit]

                    But the boys, unaware, pressed up closer......
                    Ennis as always moved in like a dozer
                    And brushed Jack's hat to the floor.
                    He kissed him by the door
                    Next thing their faces were on a poster

[LauraGigs]

~  A Lymerick Review  ~
by special request

A limerick is a five-line poem with a strict meter (beat pattern).
Lines 1, 2, and 5 of Limericks have seven to ten syllables and rhyme with one another. Lines 3 and 4 of Limericks have five to seven syllables and also rhyme with each other.  Here are good examples from this thread!

There once was a young man named Jack,
Who was pretty good in the sack,
He said with a grin,
as he wiped off his chin,
That his bud used to aim for his back!

Milli & Dave have no rhythm,
Their timing is sheer cataclysm
But funny as hell,
Their point they do sell,
I certainly ain't gonna dis 'em!

This limerick business is straining.
Just like Ray, I feel quite like complaining!
With no rhythm and rhyme
This ain’t worth not a dime.
Yet it is, one must say, entertaining!

[Lumière]

Thanks Laura!  Good review. 

Btw, who said David and I have no rhythm?.. I'm guessing it was Ray.. lol.. Ah, good times! 

Shall I start a new one?




Lil' Bobby was cute but he was a brat

[ifyoucantfixit]

                  



                              Lil' Bobby was cute but he was a brat
                              Whos mama wouldn't allow him a cat

[Lumière]

Lil' Bobby was cute but he was a brat
Whose mama wouldn't allow him a cat.
So he whined and cried,

[ifyoucantfixit]

Lil' Bobby was cute but he was a brat
Whose mama wouldn't allow him a cat.
So he whined and cried
Til her nerve she denied

          

[CellarDweller]

Lil' Bobby was cute but he was a brat
Whose mama wouldn't allow him a cat.
So he whined and cried
Til her nerve she denied
so she got him a stuffed one, that's that!