Author Topic: Where the Allegheny Meets the Monongahela - New story by Testa Dura!  (Read 23959 times)

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Re: Where the Allegheny Meets the Monongahela - New story by Testa Dura!
« Reply #30 on: March 21, 2009, 03:16:27 pm »
Great to see you here Tes. Thanks for writing and sharing your story with us

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Re: Where the Allegheny Meets the Monongahela - New story by Testa Dura!
« Reply #31 on: March 21, 2009, 05:59:20 pm »

Yes indeed! Welcome to BetterMost Tes!  :D

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Re: Where the Allegheny Meets the Monongahela - New story by Testa Dura!
« Reply #32 on: March 21, 2009, 08:48:19 pm »
Hi Tes,

As one of the fanfic co-mods, let me welcome you to Bettermost. It's good when authors can participate in the discussion with readers.

Enjoy the forum.

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Re: Where the Allegheny Meets the Monongahela - New story by Testa Dura!
« Reply #33 on: March 21, 2009, 10:13:30 pm »
Welcome to BM, Tess.  I'm really enjoying your fic, and can't wait to read the next chapter. 

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Re: Where the Allegheny Meets the Monongahela - New story by Testa Dura!
« Reply #34 on: March 25, 2009, 04:33:55 am »
I don't find a lot of use in giving two characters a dialect that I don't see related to Pennsylvania in any way, while the others talk in an uninflected fashion.  It just puts me off the story.  And it may not be a "Wyoming" dialect, but it sure hews close enough to what Annie Proulx's dialect is in "Brokeback" up to and including "warsh".

Never met a Pennsylvania native that said "warsh."

Both of my parents say "warsh". They throw quite a few random "r"s around...
They also pronounce "coach" as "coarch.
It took me into junior high to get rid of "ax".

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Re: Where the Allegheny Meets the Monongahela - New story by Testa Dura!
« Reply #35 on: March 25, 2009, 05:13:03 pm »
  Welcome Tess:
      It was wonderful to see you here after all this time.  I love your fics and think you have a great grasp
on the psychology of your characters.    Looking forward to the rest of your stories, and hope you learn
to enjoy your time here on Bettermost. 
      It has been my experience in regards to the slang you are using, like warsh and goin, that it is more
an indication of educational status, than regional.  People use what I call lazy speech patterns, I have been
raised all my life around people that talked that way, and I was in California.  They were mostly the so called
"Oakies" from the depression era migration to California.  I didnt ever think of it as regional, so much as
class and educational.

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Re: Where the Allegheny Meets the Monongahela - New story by Testa Dura!
« Reply #36 on: March 26, 2009, 06:02:57 pm »

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Re: Where the Allegheny Meets the Monongahela - New story by Testa Dura!
« Reply #37 on: April 21, 2009, 09:41:15 pm »
this story really is moving along nicely. I like the pace and I find the events very realistic.

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Re: Where the Allegheny Meets the Monongahela - New story by Testa Dura!
« Reply #38 on: April 21, 2009, 09:53:43 pm »
Thanks for the update Bud. :)   I've actually fallen way behind with this story. 

The domestic violence starting point has been very, very hard for me to get past.  I find it nearly or maybe entirely impossible to develop a sense of sympathy for Ennis with that kind of starting point.  I was hoping I'd be able to get beyond that, but I hadn't been able to do that after the first few chapters.  So, I pretty much stopped reading a couple chapters ago. 

I still really admire Tes's writing, and as I've said repeatedly 48 Days and Book of Dreams are some of my all time favorite stories.

Maybe I'll give this one another try at some point. 



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Re: Where the Allegheny Meets the Monongahela - New story by Testa Dura!
« Reply #39 on: April 23, 2009, 05:20:33 pm »
I hope you´ll give it another try, Amanda. The abuse isn´t swept under the rug as if it means nothing, but dealt with and the author realy has Ennis dealing with the consequences.

Chapter 8 is up. This story has become my latest fic addiction

http://testa-dura.livejournal.com/32844.html