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Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« on: January 20, 2007, 11:31:53 am »
One of our newest Bettermost members, haunted_by_bbm, has a story she has been working on. Missing Motel Moments and its sequel, Pine Creek.

Missing Motel Moments is finished.

Part 1: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/766.html
Part 2: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/968.html
Part 3: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/1241.html
Part 4: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/1355.html
Part 5: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/1605.html

Pine Creek

Part 1: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/2483.html
Part 2: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/2646.html
Part 3: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/3012.html
Part 4A: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/3138.html
Part 4B: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/3376.html

Missing Motel Moments is the story of Jack and Ennis's night at the Siesta Motel, at the time of their four year reunion. Pine Creek is the fishing trip they went on the next day. Rated NC17. Enjoy!

Leslie

EDIT: Part 4B has been edited to include the correct link.

« Last Edit: January 20, 2007, 07:29:41 pm by MaineWriter »
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #1 on: January 20, 2007, 12:35:54 pm »
Thanks, Leslie  :) This looks good, I don't think there are many stories out there about the night at the Siesta Motel?? I like it that it's finished too. God, I haven't done anything today but read, read and read!!  :D

*goes off to read part 1*

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #2 on: January 20, 2007, 12:57:55 pm »
Thanks, Leslie  :) This looks good, I don't think there are many stories out there about the night at the Siesta Motel?? I like it that it's finished too. God, I haven't done anything today but read, read and read!!  :D

*goes off to read part 1*

I don't know if there are other stories that fill in the night at the Siesta...and I can tell you, this one is HAWT! Enjoy...

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #3 on: January 20, 2007, 01:06:05 pm »
I don't know if there are other stories that fill in the night at the Siesta...and I can tell you, this one is HAWT! Enjoy...

L

HAWT is GOOD Leslie!  :P

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #4 on: January 20, 2007, 06:39:43 pm »
I don't know if there are other stories that fill in the night at the Siesta...and I can tell you, this one is HAWT! Enjoy...

L

Thank you, sweetie.   ;)
I was going for a little heat.    ;)

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #5 on: January 20, 2007, 06:47:11 pm »
One of our newest Bettermost members, haunted_by_bbm, has a story she has been working on. Missing Motel Moments and its sequel, Pine Creek.

Missing Motel Moments is finished.

Part 1: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/766.html
Part 2: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/968.html
Part 3: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/1241.html
Part 4: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/1355.html
Part 5: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/1605.html

Pine Creek

Part 1: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/2483.html
Part 2: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/2646.html
Part 3: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/3012.html
Part 4A: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/3138.html
Part 4B: http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/3138.html

Missing Motel Moments is the story of Jack and Ennis's night at the Siesta Motel, at the time of their four year reunion. Pine Creek is the fishing trip they went on the next day. Rated NC17. Enjoy!

Leslie


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/3376.html#cutid1


Hi Leslie,

Thank you so much for the support and the shout out!   hehehe

I've attached the link here for Part 4B of Pine Creek.
I think you have Part 4A listed twice.   :)

Thank you so much for sending me that PM and inviting me to mozy on over here.
I wish I'd found you sooner.
I feel so welcome already!!!   :D

Thanks again.

C    :)

http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/3376.html#cutid1

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #6 on: January 20, 2007, 07:31:17 pm »
Okay, I modified my original post, so all links should be correct. Thanks for setting me straight, LOL!

Enjoy the story, folks...I know "haunted" is interested in some discussion!

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #7 on: January 22, 2007, 02:04:57 am »


     well dear i am so glad to see you with us...i havent read any of your story, but i certainly

will...i love that you are finished with one and are starting another one...i am always so upset

when there is a story you really like and it never gets finished....i am also glad that you are

welcoming the discussion...                                        and hope you get that other thing

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #8 on: January 22, 2007, 04:36:25 am »

     well dear i am so glad to see you with us...i havent read any of your story, but i certainly

will...i love that you are finished with one and are starting another one...i am always so upset

when there is a story you really like and it never gets finished....i am also glad that you are

welcoming the discussion...                                        and hope you get that other thing

figured out with the chat room...we welcome new people with open arms....janice

Janice,

Thank you so much for the warm welcome that I've received this week.
It is so nice to be here...and I really wish I'd found y'all sooner.  lol

I hope you like my stories, and you can pretty much count on me finishing what I start.   The fifth and final part to "Pine Creek" will be posted this Thursday, the 25th.   

And for future stories, if I start one and don't finish it...well, you can pretty much assume then that I've passed on from this world to the next, because that would be the only reason I wouldn't finish.  hehehe   

Both the stories that I've written so far, I started with the end in mind...so I knew exactly where I was going with them.  And since all of my short stories are going to be 'canon,' it'll continue to be the same way...I'll write them fairly quickly.  And I won't go more than a week in between posts.   :) 

Hope that helps, because I agree with you.  I'd hate to be deeply engrossed and in love with a story, and then not have the satisfaction of reading it through to an end.  That would suck.  lol !

Thanks again for the great welcome this week.   :)

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #9 on: January 22, 2007, 05:25:13 am »
Hi  haunted.
I started reading your stories two days ago , and I love it ! I've almost finished Pine Creek.
It's good to read about the missing moments and how their relation grew .
And you even managed to put Annie in the story , that's so good .

Thanks for your beautiful stories , and I hope to read many more of them .

Nancy

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #10 on: January 22, 2007, 04:08:01 pm »
Hi  haunted.
I started reading your stories two days ago , and I love it ! I've almost finished Pine Creek.
It's good to read about the missing moments and how their relation grew .
And you even managed to put Annie in the story , that's so good .

Thanks for your beautiful stories , and I hope to read many more of them .

Nancy

Hi Nancy,

Thank you so much!  I'm so glad you're enjoying them.  And that's A LOT of reading in two days.   lol  I'm very flattered that they grabbed ya.   ;) 

Fitting 'Annie' into the story was something I had planned from the beginning.  I dropped hints in Part 3 of "MMM" but then didn't make it all clear until Part 1 of PC.   It was great fun to write.  And I'm not done with Annie yet.   She's going to make another appearance about eight years down the road for them...(about 8 months down the road for me and my writing. lol )  I can plan my stories out well in advance.  My mind is crazy that way.     ;)   

Thanks again, Nancy.
I really enjoy and appreciate the feedback and discussion.   :)

cag    (My initials.   ;)   I'm feeling less  'haunted' these days...more peaceful. )    :)
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #11 on: January 23, 2007, 03:47:14 am »
Thank you, sweetie.   ;)
I was going for a little heat.    ;)

C    :)

                WELL well, when we last communicated, i had no idea you were even a writer.
     i just read the first chapter of your moments story...i found it very compelling, real, and
     a wonderful read..it drew you in from the start...being inside of both of the guys heads
     was a very interesting way to get very involved in the moment...ennis' regrets, and
     longings...his regrets from past decisions, and jack just needing to have the contact..
     his hopes realized in so many ways...the sad thought that runs through my own mind,
     knowing the future and how it all plays out...but love the way you tell, the time when
     it was all so full of hope,,,                     again welcome to bettermost,,,so glad to see
     you here..                                                                        janice



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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #12 on: January 23, 2007, 04:26:26 am »
                WELL well, when we last communicated, i had no idea you were even a writer.
     i just read the first chapter of your moments story...i found it very compelling, real, and
     a wonderful read..it drew you in from the start...being inside of both of the guys heads
     was a very interesting way to get very involved in the moment...ennis' regrets, and
     longings...his regrets from past decisions, and jack just needing to have the contact..
     his hopes realized in so many ways...the sad thought that runs through my own mind,
     knowing the future and how it all plays out...but love the way you tell, the time when
     it was all so full of hope,,,                     again welcome to bettermost,,,so glad to see
     you here..                                                                        janice

Janice,

Thank you so much, sweetie,
Glad you enjoyed it. 
It is so much fun to get inside our boys heads. 

It seems only fair to me that they let me in their heads...after all,
they've been under my skin for damn near a year already.   ;)    hehehe

I really love it here.   

C   :)
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #13 on: January 23, 2007, 08:55:48 am »
Saw the recommendation - and loved the title "Missing Motel Moments"  - immediately!  I've read the first three chapters - and they're fantastic!  I agree with what Janice said about being drawn in - and getting inside Jack's and Ennis's minds.  Very, very well done! 

And oh, yeah - you were going for a little heat?  Well, you definitely succeeded - and then some!   :laugh:

Glad you're here and thanks for the stories!

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #14 on: January 23, 2007, 02:59:54 pm »
Saw the recommendation - and loved the title "Missing Motel Moments"  - immediately!  I've read the first three chapters - and they're fantastic!  I agree with what Janice said about being drawn in - and getting inside Jack's and Ennis's minds.  Very, very well done! 

And oh, yeah - you were going for a little heat?  Well, you definitely succeeded - and then some!   :laugh:

Glad you're here and thanks for the stories!

Marie

Marie,

So glad you liked the title...I thought it was pretty catchy.   lol    ;)
I'm really glad you're enjoying my stories.
I'm having tremendous fun writing them.   :D
The final part of "Pine Creek" will be posted on Thursday. 

C     :)
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #15 on: January 23, 2007, 07:26:25 pm »


         well i finished the motel moments story last night....it was so teriffic..i loved
    the way they came together, and made such a connection...and i cant wait to
    read the pine creek one as well...i will wait until thurs to read that one, so i
    can read it all in one sitting as well....i love to read them that way....
                                                                           janice,,,,
     i really liked this,,,,thanks so much









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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #16 on: January 23, 2007, 09:56:46 pm »

         well i finished the motel moments story last night....it was so teriffic..i loved
    the way they came together, and made such a connection...and i cant wait to
    read the pine creek one as well...i will wait until thurs to read that one, so i
    can read it all in one sitting as well....i love to read them that way....
                                                                           janice,,,,
     i really liked this,,,,thanks so much








Hi Janice,   :)

Thank you so much!  I'm so glad you enjoyed it.   :)
And I totally understand what you mean about reading stories that are already complete.   I like reading them that way too.

I read  "A Love Born From Steel," that way, back in October when I first discovered Fanfiction.net.   I started reading one night, and before I knew it, it was three in the morning.  lol   I think I read the whole thing over a three day period.  It remains my all-time favorite...and I've read a lot!   ;) lol

Thanks again, sweetie.
Hope you enjoy "Pine Creek." 

C   :)
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #17 on: January 24, 2007, 09:08:49 am »

I read  "A Love Born From Steel," that way, back in October when I first discovered Fanfiction.net.   I started reading one night, and before I knew it, it was three in the morning.  lol   I think I read the whole thing over a three day period.  It remains my all-time favorite...and I've read a lot!   ;) lol


C   :)

Ah, thank you so much! I love compliments like this...

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #18 on: January 24, 2007, 05:40:16 pm »
Ah, thank you so much! I love compliments like this...

Hugs,

Leslie

Hugs back at ya, sweetie.

Have to tell you, I love  "TTVofT," so much...you've had me thinking about chili for days now.   lol   Finally made a huge pot of it, only to have to eat it by myself.  hehehe   My husband is out of town, and my kids don't have time to eat with me.   ;)    I might have to invite the neighbors down.   lol   ;)

Here's to hopin you never stop writin.   :)

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #19 on: January 25, 2007, 06:43:18 am »
The conclusion of Pine Creek, Part 5:

http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/3779.html#cutid1

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« Reply #20 on: January 25, 2007, 02:33:55 pm »
you can just feel the love these two guys have in your words .  Sigh
I loved this.  It is continuing.... right ?   Please :-*

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #21 on: January 25, 2007, 04:17:05 pm »
you can just feel the love these two guys have in your words .  Sigh
I loved this.  It is continuing.... right ?   Please :-*

Karen

Thank you, Karen. 
Thank you so much.   :)

Yes, I'm continuing on with my tender "add-ins."
I aleady know what I'll be writing for the next one, but I won't be posting for about two weeks.  RL deadlines are rather looming in my face right now.   lol
Look for my next story, "Warmest Week of the Year," on Thursday, February 8th. 

Thanks again, sweetie.
So glad you enjoyed it.  :)


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« Reply #22 on: January 25, 2007, 04:19:14 pm »
"The room stank of semen and smoke and sweat and whiskey, of old carpet and sour hay, saddle leather, shit and cheap soap.  Ennis lay spread-eagled, spent and wet, breathing deep, still half tumescent, Jack blowing forceful cigarette clouds like whale spouts..." – Annie Proulx

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #23 on: January 26, 2007, 03:01:33 am »


   i just wanted to tell you how much i loved the two stories you have posted here...i read one all the way from start to finish. and then the second within 24 hrs...i want to tell you i am so glad you
came to bettermost to share your wonderful talent with us all...i may have never read this if not for the fact you came here.     i am looking forward to the next one too.                         janice



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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #24 on: January 26, 2007, 06:42:00 am »
OH MY F***ING GOD..........I have just read the first two chapters of the Missing Motel Moments, and all I can say is WOW!!!!!.......

Great words, great expressions, great descriptions.....felt like I was there with them (OMG).....could nearly smell and taste them.

I know, I wont be able to resist going in for the third round, just gotta cool myself down and get a grip of myself before i dive into it again.

Thanks for sharing this story with us.
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Re: Missing Motel Moments & Pine Creek by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #25 on: January 26, 2007, 03:05:36 pm »

   i just wanted to tell you how much i loved the two stories you have posted here...i read one all the way from start to finish. and then the second within 24 hrs...i want to tell you i am so glad you
came to bettermost to share your wonderful talent with us all...i may have never read this if not for the fact you came here.     i am looking forward to the next one too.                         janice

Janice,

Damn, you were fast!   hehehe
Thank you SO much, sweetie.
I'm so glad you enjoyed them.   :)

I too am so glad I came here. 
There are stories I'm reading now,
that I may not have discovered if not for coming here.   
I felt welcome from the very first moment.   
Thank you, so much.      :)

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #26 on: January 26, 2007, 03:10:56 pm »
OH MY F***ING GOD..........I have just read the first two chapters of the Missing Motel Moments, and all I can say is WOW!!!!!.......

Great words, great expressions, great descriptions.....felt like I was there with them (OMG).....could nearly smell and taste them.

I know, I wont be able to resist going in for the third round, just gotta cool myself down and get a grip of myself before i dive into it again.

Thanks for sharing this story with us.

Katie,

:D   Thank you so much, sweetie.
So glad I'm gettin ya all riled up.    ;)

You might want to make sure you are sufficiently rested before reading Part 4...that's the longest chapter...and they're in bed the entire time.    hehehe    ;)

Thanks again.  So glad you're enjoying my story.    :)

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #27 on: January 26, 2007, 05:45:07 pm »
Sat up till 2am in the morning reading chapters 3 and 4........Was gonna read chapter 5 then too, but decided, what a wonderful way to go to sleep with chapter 4 still spinning around in my head.......
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #28 on: January 26, 2007, 06:12:03 pm »
Sat up till 2am in the morning reading chapters 3 and 4........Was gonna read chapter 5 then too, but decided, what a wonderful way to go to sleep with chapter 4 still spinning around in my head.......

hehehe   
Can't argue with your logic...I often read a tasty chapter before drifting off to sleep.
Last night, I read some of Louise's work before slipping off to sleep.   Had some great dreams as a result.   ;)    hehehe

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #29 on: January 26, 2007, 09:06:26 pm »
Heya C !

I've loved both of your stories!  Congrats on finishing Pine Creek!  Can't wait to see what you come up with next!

cheers!
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #30 on: January 26, 2007, 10:01:45 pm »
Heya C !

I've loved both of your stories!  Congrats on finishing Pine Creek!  Can't wait to see what you come up with next!

cheers!
Amanda
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Hey Amanda,   :)

Thanks so much!
So glad you enjoyed them.   :D
And I've still got lots of fun ideas in store for our boys.       hehehe
I'll be posting again February 8th.    :)

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #31 on: January 29, 2007, 11:21:10 pm »
Just finished the whole lot....Missing Moments and Pine Creek

I feel absolutely exhausted, but oh what a blissful exhaustion...

Thank you!!

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #32 on: January 30, 2007, 01:04:33 am »
Just finished the whole lot....Missing Moments and Pine Creek

I feel absolutely exhausted, but oh what a blissful exhaustion...

Thank you!!



Hi Katie,

Thank you so much for reading!
So glad you enjoyed them.

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #33 on: January 30, 2007, 09:20:59 am »
Hey, C*!

I finally finished both stories and loved every single perfectly-chosen word and truly appreciated all your exquisite descriptive details - the funny, the tender, and the heartbreaking. 

The end of Part 4B -

For with that final look, their eyes met, held, and locked, and their souls were laid bare…two vast limitless mirrors facing each other…reflecting the truth, illuminating the certainty, and revealing the reality…that lived in both their hearts.

And in that ultimate moment, before the infinite shuddering finally forced his eyes closed at last, Jack finally understood…fully and completely understood…why Ennis had been so afraid to open his eyes.


-- wow.  You are one talented writer - thank you so much for sharing your talent with us. 

Looking forward to "Warmest Week of the Year" - love that title, too!

Thanks again -

Marie
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #34 on: January 30, 2007, 11:48:35 am »
Hey, C*!

I finally finished both stories and loved every single perfectly-chosen word and truly appreciated all your exquisite descriptive details - the funny, the tender, and the heartbreaking. 

The end of Part 4B -

For with that final look, their eyes met, held, and locked, and their souls were laid bare…two vast limitless mirrors facing each other…reflecting the truth, illuminating the certainty, and revealing the reality…that lived in both their hearts.

And in that ultimate moment, before the infinite shuddering finally forced his eyes closed at last, Jack finally understood…fully and completely understood…why Ennis had been so afraid to open his eyes.


-- wow.  You are one talented writer - thank you so much for sharing your talent with us. 

Looking forward to "Warmest Week of the Year" - love that title, too!

Thanks again -

Marie

Marie,

Thank you so much, sweetie!
Appreciate it more than I can say.
So glad you enjoyed my stories.      :)

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #35 on: February 06, 2007, 12:15:17 am »


   I too loved your story, and am so glad you are here,, and also enjoy your
participation in the fanfic drabble thread.  I have loved trying something new, and seeing those that have been writing for a while participating..
   Will read your sequel as well, and i will leave you some response as well.
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #36 on: February 06, 2007, 02:33:01 am »

   I too loved your story, and am so glad you are here,, and also enjoy your
participation in the fanfic drabble thread.  I have loved trying something new, and seeing those that have been writing for a while participating..
   Will read your sequel as well, and i will leave you some response as well.
                                                                  janice


Janice,

Thank you, sweetie.   :)
Writing the drabbles was great fun. 
First time I've written BBM drabbles.
I usually have trouble writing anything short.   lol    ;)
I'll try to jump in the next one as well. 
RL deadlines have kept me really busy the last two weeks.   :) 
But I'll still be posting a new story on Thursday.    :)

Thanks again, sweetie.

C*
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Warmest Week of the Year (Sequel to "Pine Creek")
« Reply #37 on: February 09, 2007, 04:05:44 am »


Warmest Week of the Year –  (Sequel to “Pine Creek”) (Complete)


“Warmest Week of the year” picks up after “Pine Creek.”
This tale is another one of my canon-based  ‘missing moments’ stories
taking place in May 1968. It is the account of the first fishing trip
after the initial reunion takes place in September 1967.

~~~~~

http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/4123.html#cutid1 - Part 1
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/4377.html#cutid1 - Part 2A
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/4677.html#cutid1 - Part 2B
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/5117.html#cutid1 - Part 3
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/5301.html#cutid1 - Part 4 
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/5484.html#cutid1 - Part 5A
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/6079.html#cutid1 - Part 5B
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/6256.html#cutid1 - Part 6A
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/6628.html#cutid1 - Part 6B
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/6774.html#cutid1 - Part 6C - Drabble
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/6946.html#cutid1 - Part 7A
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/7700.html#cutid1 - Part 7B
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/8288.html#cutid1 - Part 7C
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/8651.html#cutid1 - Part 7D - Drabble
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/9179.html#cutid1 - Part 8A
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/9337.html#cutid1 - Part 8B - Drabble
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/9890.html#cutid1 - Part 9A
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/10129.html#cutid1 - Part 9B - Drabble
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/10708.html#cutid1 - Part 10A
http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/10794.html#cutid1 - Part 10B


Feedback more than welcome and appreciated!


Thank you!

C*

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #38 on: February 10, 2007, 01:27:05 pm »
Hey, C

I just finished Part 1 of "Warmest Week of the Year" - it was simply wonderful - can't praise it enough.

Loved how you framed it for us - the hour-by-hour parallels of the two loving daddies - and all the while those postcards next to their hearts and thoughts of each other in their minds.  Ahh . . . sweet anticipation.

Thanks again - you have a true gift.

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Warmest Week of the Year - Parts 2A & 2B
« Reply #39 on: February 15, 2007, 11:26:34 pm »
NEW   CHAPTERS   POSTING


Warmest Week of the Year – Parts 2A & 2B  (Sequel to “Pine Creek”)


This story is another one of my canon ‘add-ins.’
“Warmest Week of the year” picks up after “Pine Creek,” in May 1968.

This chapter is one long flashback to Brokeback
for our boys, focusing on the first week after FNIT. 
I wanted to explore the possibilities of how things could have
developed for J & E, and also establish a precedent for
showing emotional growth over time.
That is why the entire chapter is in italics,
with the exception of the final four paragraphs,
where we finally see who is having the flashback and why.


Part 2A:

http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/4377.html#cutid1

Part 2B:

http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/4677.html#cutid1


Feedback more than welcome and appreciated!


Thank you!


C*


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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #40 on: February 15, 2007, 11:30:28 pm »
Hey, C

I just finished Part 1 of "Warmest Week of the Year" - it was simply wonderful - can't praise it enough.

Loved how you framed it for us - the hour-by-hour parallels of the two loving daddies - and all the while those postcards next to their hearts and thoughts of each other in their minds.  Ahh . . . sweet anticipation.

Thanks again - you have a true gift.

Marie

Marie, 

Thank you so much, sweetie. 
I'm so glad you enjoyed it.   :)

You always give the nicest feedback.   :)
( I noticed with the 'drabblefest' too...you are such a wonderful encourager.)   :)

I posted Parts 2A & 2B earlier this evening. 
Hope you enjoy them.     :)


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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #41 on: February 16, 2007, 01:11:17 pm »
C*...

Thanks for this update! I hope you'll come back to the drabblefest...we have been missing you.

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #42 on: February 16, 2007, 01:16:48 pm »
C*...

Thanks for this update! I hope you'll come back to the drabblefest...we have been missing you.

Leslie

Yep, yep and yep!  I look foward to some great reading this weekend!

Thanks,

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« Reply #43 on: February 16, 2007, 02:40:08 pm »
Okay, C*, so I was a bad girl and read Parts 2a and 2b at my desk during lunch!   :o :o :o is all I can say! Those chapters were great....just wonderful, absolutely great.

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #44 on: February 16, 2007, 03:36:44 pm »
C*...

Thanks for this update! I hope you'll come back to the drabblefest...we have been missing you.

Leslie

Thank you, sweetie.   :)

I love the drabblefest.  :)
I've been trying to make a point to keep up with reading all of them every day, (when I'm supposed to be working)   LOL   But RL gets in the way of my daily doses of J & E just a little too much for my taste.  Ya know how that is?   

With my last chapter I just posted, all 11,500 words of it...I wrote the entire thing last Sunday afternoon.  I think I only stopped once to get up to pee.  I think I forgot to eat.  lol   It was the only time I had to work on it.   I knew what I was going to write, so it came out quickly, but I just wish I had more time.   lol   
Now I sound like Jack...'just a little more time...never enough time..."    ;)

I'm going to check out the prompts today...I promise.   ;)

C* 

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #45 on: February 16, 2007, 03:38:06 pm »
Yep, yep and yep!  I look foward to some great reading this weekend!

Thanks,

Marie

:)  :)  :) 
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« Reply #46 on: February 16, 2007, 03:40:05 pm »
Okay, C*, so I was a bad girl and read Parts 2a and 2b at my desk during lunch!   :o :o :o is all I can say! Those chapters were great....just wonderful, absolutely great.

Panting out a thanks to you...

L

LOL    Thanks so much, sweetie!
I love that icon with the big eyeballs!   lol      ;)
So glad I heated up your lunch for you...I understand it's pretty cold where you are.   ;)

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« Reply #47 on: February 16, 2007, 04:03:14 pm »
I can't get enough of this (now I am re-reading!). I need to give you guys a quote, my highest compliment!

From Part 2B

“Mighty nice indeed,” Jack repeated, sighing deeply, accepting the bottle with a quiet ‘thank you’ as he drank deeply, completely ignoring his mental chastising of himself of the day before for drinking too much.

“Surely is,” Ennis repeated as well, letting his left hand come down to rest lightly on Jack’s right shoulder. Jack closed his eyes and sighed at the touch, letting his head lean just a little into it…not being able to decide for a moment what was more beautiful to him, the majestic scene in front of him, or the friend sitting beside him. Jack’s eyes remained closed as he contemplated this and leaned even closer into Ennis’ body…that in itself giving him his answer. Jack let his right hand ease up and around Ennis’ calf, holding him contentedly, finishing off his cigarette, while the sun completed its celebrated daily journey.

Ennis looked down at the dark-haired man sitting so comfortably beside him, and found he couldn’t define the feeling in his gut, couldn’t explain the reason why he had left the sheep early that day, and had even lied about it when asked. Couldn’t explain it…just wanted more…more time. Wanted another hour here or there…another few minutes wherever he could get them…didn’t want to ride back up to the sheep that night, although he knew he had to, and he knew he would. But that didn’t change the fact that he didn’t want to.

Ennis sighed deeply. Jack heard it and looked up, smiling, as Ennis capped the whiskey bottle and put out his cigarette.


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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #48 on: February 16, 2007, 04:08:58 pm »
Thank you, Leslie.   :)
All the feedback I've gotten this morning has been sooooo great!    :D

C*
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #49 on: February 17, 2007, 11:53:28 am »
C*,

When I finished reading I just sat for a few minutes really absorbing that beautiful experience. 

"On their fourth day together.  .  .  "
"On the fifth day,"
"On the sixth day,"
"..the morning of the seventh day,"

You've given us "The Creation of Jack and Ennis." 

And then passages such as this:

The third time was a point unto itself, equally memorable, just as mind-numbingly intense, for Ennis entered Jack so needfully, moaning like a lonely wounded animal, a searching creature desperately trying to find his way home, and didn’t stop moaning the entire time he was thrusting steadily, hungrily, hopefully…all the while pleading with his bodily movements for Jack to provide the safe haven he craved, whether or not he’d ever learn to ask for it with words.

Wow. 

You give us such exquisite details of their lovemaking - but not one single word is superfluous and through these beautiful words you give us the very essence of Jack, the very essence of Ennis, and the very essence of their love.

Well, I  could go on and on - Ennis needing Jack to smile and Jack thinking that maybe God did like him . . .

That was some "bonus-dreaming"!  And just like Jack, I'm thinking about that week ahead in Pine Creek - and just like Jack, I'm smiling!

Thanks so much, C*!

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #50 on: February 17, 2007, 06:26:14 pm »
C*,

When I finished reading I just sat for a few minutes really absorbing that beautiful experience. 

"On their fourth day together.  .  .  "
"On the fifth day,"
"On the sixth day,"
"..the morning of the seventh day,"

You've given us "The Creation of Jack and Ennis." 

And then passages such as this:

The third time was a point unto itself, equally memorable, just as mind-numbingly intense, for Ennis entered Jack so needfully, moaning like a lonely wounded animal, a searching creature desperately trying to find his way home, and didn’t stop moaning the entire time he was thrusting steadily, hungrily, hopefully…all the while pleading with his bodily movements for Jack to provide the safe haven he craved, whether or not he’d ever learn to ask for it with words.

Wow. 

You give us such exquisite details of their lovemaking - but not one single word is superfluous and through these beautiful words you give us the very essence of Jack, the very essence of Ennis, and the very essence of their love.

Well, I  could go on and on - Ennis needing Jack to smile and Jack thinking that maybe God did like him . . .

That was some "bonus-dreaming"!  And just like Jack, I'm thinking about that week ahead in Pine Creek - and just like Jack, I'm smiling!

Thanks so much, C*!

Marie


Marie,

Oh sweet lady, I love you!  You just made my day.   :)

Yes, I see their bond as so spiritual...it was very intentional with this chapter to produce a "Creation" experience.    :D    It had to be seven days, and it had to culminate with a moment that required they both be emotionally ready for each other, not just physically eager.  I'm so delighted that you really felt it the way I intended when I was writing it.    I love your wording,  "The Creation of Jack and Ennis."    :)

Thank you so much for all your wonderful feedback, sweetie. 
It means so much to me.    :)

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"The room stank of semen and smoke and sweat and whiskey, of old carpet and sour hay, saddle leather, shit and cheap soap.  Ennis lay spread-eagled, spent and wet, breathing deep, still half tumescent, Jack blowing forceful cigarette clouds like whale spouts..." – Annie Proulx

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"Warmest Week of the Year - Part 3" (Sequel to "Pine Creek")
« Reply #51 on: February 22, 2007, 11:08:58 pm »


NEW   CHAPTER   POSTING


“Warmest Week of the Year” – Part 3   (Sequel to “Pine Creek”)


This story is another one of my canon ‘add-ins.’
“Warmest Week of the year” picks up after “Pine Creek,” in May 1968.
There isn’t a reference to 1968 in the book or the film.
So, this story is entirely pulled out of my crazy mind.    ;)


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Feedback more than welcome and appreciated!


Thank you!


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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #52 on: February 23, 2007, 02:23:16 pm »
Hi, C*!

Yay, a new chapter!  What a great way to start the weekend!

Gorgeous, gorgeous writing, as always.

There is such a perfect symmetry to your writing and it reflects so beautifully the perfect symmetry of Jack and Ennis.   I just want to keep reading the words over and over again.

I love that Ennis brought Summer and Blue   :)  And it's so fitting -  Ennis can only be the true Ennis when he is with Jack and when he is with his horses. 

It was a beautiful sound.    . . .

 . . . and that was a beautiful chapter!  I always love your humor - thanks for ending with a laugh!

Thanks, C*!

Marie

P.S.  I'm worried about Ennis's ominous feeling - I trust his instincts!
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #53 on: February 23, 2007, 05:58:22 pm »
Hi, C*!

Yay, a new chapter!  What a great way to start the weekend!

Gorgeous, gorgeous writing, as always.

There is such a perfect symmetry to your writing and it reflects so beautifully the perfect symmetry of Jack and Ennis.   I just want to keep reading the words over and over again.

I love that Ennis brought Summer and Blue   :)  And it's so fitting -  Ennis can only be the true Ennis when he is with Jack and when he is with his horses. 

It was a beautiful sound.    . . .

 . . . and that was a beautiful chapter!  I always love your humor - thanks for ending with a laugh!

Thanks, C*!

Marie

P.S.  I'm worried about Ennis's ominous feeling - I trust his instincts!

Marie, 

Thank you so much for always taking the time to read and comment.
You are the BEST encourager.   :)

I know I'm not the first one to work in a lot of sentiment with Ennis' horses,
but I think my names are original...I think.  I haven't read them in any other fics so far.  With certain details, like the horses, it becomes a little difficult to sound original, because I believe we all see Ennis a certain way when it comes to his animals.   :)  But I see that as a good thing, and really a tribute to Annie and the screenwriters because their depictions were so strong as to resonate with all of us so similarly.    :)   

I know there is one fic that has a black horse with blue eyes named "Twister."   And I just absolutely LOVED that.   :D    I think it might be Leslie's story...but I'm trying to remember.   (Gosh, I've read so many.  Sometimes, I do start to get them mixed up)  lol

You quoted one of my favorite lines to write.   And it's funny, because it's so short.
But sometimes, the short lines can really pack a punch.   ;)

"It was a beautiful sound..."

I swear there are times when these boys are in the room with me when I'm writing.   ;)

And I'm so glad you like my attempts with humor.   lol
Humor is rather new for me.
I've written a great deal of emotional, angsty poetry over the years,
and much of it has been published.  But these little stories are really
my strongest attempts at humor, and it is such a refreshing change.   :)

Thanks again, sweetie.
I look foward to your feedback every week.   :)

C*   

P.S. -  And good for you for picking up on Ennis' ominous feeling.  I believe you are the first one to mention that so far.  And you have good reason to trust his instincts. 
I don't throw in details like that randomly.  If Ennis has a feeling about something,
it's gonna go somewhere.   A hint though...it may build for several chapters.    ;)   
Good catch.   I love it when people are getting the details.   

'haunted'     :)


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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #54 on: February 23, 2007, 06:21:01 pm »
Yes, Twister was my invention....big black stallion with blue eyes.

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #55 on: February 23, 2007, 06:31:14 pm »
Yes, Twister was my invention....big black stallion with blue eyes.

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I thought so!!!   :)
I'm going to edit my entry and add an Author's note
at the end with a shout out to you.   ;)
I knew I'd read the "blue eyes"  in another fic.   :)   

Thanks.   :)

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #56 on: March 02, 2007, 01:13:17 am »

NEW   CHAPTER   POSTING


“Warmest Week of the Year” – Part 4   (Sequel to “Pine Creek”)


This story is another one of my canon ‘add-ins.’
“Warmest Week of the year” picks up after “Pine Creek,” in May 1968.
There isn’t a reference to 1968 in the book or the film.
So, this story is entirely pulled out of my crazy mind.     ;)


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Feedback more than welcome and appreciated!


Thank you!


C*


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"The room stank of semen and smoke and sweat and whiskey, of old carpet and sour hay, saddle leather, shit and cheap soap.  Ennis lay spread-eagled, spent and wet, breathing deep, still half tumescent, Jack blowing forceful cigarette clouds like whale spouts..." – Annie Proulx

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #57 on: March 02, 2007, 04:27:49 pm »
NEW   CHAPTER   POSTING

“Warmest Week of the Year” – Part 4   (Sequel to “Pine Creek”)


WOO HOO!!!  I'm gonna try and wait until tomorrow so I have time to savor every word - don't know if I'll make it, though!   :)

Thanks, C*
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #58 on: March 02, 2007, 08:15:22 pm »
WOO HOO!!!  I'm gonna try and wait until tomorrow so I have time to savor every word - don't know if I'll make it, though!   :)

Thanks, C*
Marie

Hi Marie,   :)

Thanks so much.
Look forward to hearing what you think.   ;)

Love ya, sweetie.
You are the BEST cheerleader.
(Are you enjoying those pom poms?)      :D

C*      :)

P.S. - If it helps to know this...this is one of my shorter chapters.   ;) 
It's only  5,300 words.   ;)   lol   
(Chapter 2 was almost 12,000 words -
so that gives you a basis for comparison. )    ;)   lol     C*
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #59 on: March 03, 2007, 02:59:30 pm »
Hey, C*!

I''m back.  Scarfed that chapter right up the first time - and then went back and savored every word - the only way to really do your words justice. 

You mentioned once that humor was new to you as a writer - wow - I can't believe that.  The dialogue flows so naturally . . .  it's obvious that our boys haven't just gotten under your skin, they've taken residence in your brain as well!   :)  Ennis and his crazy, "dirty joke" fruit cocktail - is that just so Ennis, or what?   :laugh:  Ya know, I love this balance to their relationship - this give and take, the many levels.  Ennis views himself as the protector - Jack allows him this; Jack is in many ways more worldly - but he knows and respects the intelligent, thinking man behind Ennis's humble demeanor.

I loved this:

. . .hefty log they were sharing, an ancient fallen limb, large and craggy, a permanent fixture of their preferred campground, having resided in that spot for as long as Ennis could remember.

How perfect -  permanent, timeless, created by God.  A physical representation of their love - and why all of this -

drove Ennis to a primal place, ancient and primordial, primitive and pure,  . . .

the primal meeting the spiritual… . . .

filling the sky with a resonating joy so few ever come to know. . . .

Unable to speak, powerless to stop, Ennis gripped tighter, wanting Jack’s cry to become part of his thrashing soul, willing the piercing howl to be absorbed into his very limbs, as they soared together, clinging in concert, two desperately fervent bodies reaching a mutual overriding release.


 - just had to happen exactly there.  Damn, you're good.

I probably won't be able to resist going back and reading again.   :)  Thanks, as always.

Love ya back,
Marie

P.S.  Re Ennis's ominous feelings - can't wait to see where that is leading . . . I won't even hazard a guess - not with a writer of your caliber!  :)



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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #60 on: March 03, 2007, 03:33:42 pm »
Hey, C*!

I''m back.  Scarfed that chapter right up the first time - and then went back and savored every word - the only way to really do your words justice. 

You mentioned once that humor was new to you as a writer - wow - I can't believe that.  The dialogue flows so naturally . . .  it's obvious that our boys haven't just gotten under your skin, they've taken residence in your brain as well!   :)  Ennis and his crazy, "dirty joke" fruit cocktail - is that just so Ennis, or what?   :laugh:  Ya know, I love this balance to their relationship - this give and take, the many levels.  Ennis views himself as the protector - Jack allows him this; Jack is in many ways more worldly - but he knows and respects the intelligent, thinking man behind Ennis's humble demeanor.

I loved this:

. . .hefty log they were sharing, an ancient fallen limb, large and craggy, a permanent fixture of their preferred campground, having resided in that spot for as long as Ennis could remember.

How perfect -  permanent, timeless, created by God.  A physical representation of their love - and why all of this -

drove Ennis to a primal place, ancient and primordial, primitive and pure,  . . .

the primal meeting the spiritual… . . .

filling the sky with a resonating joy so few ever come to know. . . .

Unable to speak, powerless to stop, Ennis gripped tighter, wanting Jack’s cry to become part of his thrashing soul, willing the piercing howl to be absorbed into his very limbs, as they soared together, clinging in concert, two desperately fervent bodies reaching a mutual overriding release.


 - just had to happen exactly there.  Damn, you're good.

I probably won't be able to resist going back and reading again.   :)  Thanks, as always.

Love ya back,
Marie

P.S.  Re Ennis's ominous feelings - can't wait to see where that is leading . . . I won't even hazard a guess - not with a writer of your caliber!  :)





Marie,

Thank you so much, sweetie.
I always look forward to your comments. 
You are so kind and generous, and thorough.    :)

And you make me feel so comfortable in certain areas that I previously questioned...like the humor.    :)   LOL   But it's just so easy to write the banter for our boys. 

Yes, they are under my skin, in my brain, in my blood...in every pore.  I try to joke about how they won't quit talking to me...only...it's really not a joke.   lol   That's how it really is with characters that are so completely alive.  I haven't experienced any type of 'block' or slowing down of the dialogue in my head since I started writing these stories three months ago.  If anything, I just wish I had more time, so I could get the words out faster.    ;)   My brain keeps jumping ahead, faster than I can type.  I already know what I'll be writing for  '72, '76, '79...and beyond.   

I just need to find a way to be independently wealthy, so I can write my 'add-ins' full time.     ;)    hehehe

You are just so incredible with the feedback, even with the drabbles.  :) 
I love all of your comments and insights on those too. 

I used to question my ability to pack a punch in 300 words or less.  But every time I write a drabble now, and get your feedback, I just smile for the rest of the day.   :)

Thanks so much.
I appreciate all your time and thoughtfulness.  :)

I'm going to cut and paste your beautiful comments on Part 4 over to my LJ, so I can read them again in conjunction with the other comments.  Hope you don't mind if I do this.  Sometimes, I re-read the comments when I'm working on the next chapter.  It helps me to 'feel' where people are emotionally with my story.   :)

Love ya, sweetie.

C*
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #61 on: March 03, 2007, 06:39:07 pm »

I'm going to cut and paste your beautiful comments on Part 4 over to my LJ, so I can read them again in conjunction with the other comments.  Hope you don't mind if I do this.  Sometimes, I re-read the comments when I'm working on the next chapter.  It helps me to 'feel' where people are emotionally with my story.   :)

Oh, cut and paste away!  :)  Next time I'll post them in both places!   :)

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #62 on: March 03, 2007, 07:11:46 pm »
Oh, cut and paste away!  :)  Next time I'll post them in both places!   :)

Marie

Thank you, sweetie.   :D

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #63 on: March 08, 2007, 02:39:23 am »
NEW   CHAPTER   POSTING


“Warmest Week of the Year” – Part  5  (Sequel to “Pine Creek”)


“Warmest Week of the year” picks up after “Pine Creek.”
This story is another one of my canon ‘add-ins,’
taking place in May 1968. It is the account of
the first five-day fishing trip after the
initial reunion takes place in September 1967.

“The two men sat that way for a minute more, maybe two, not sure why, but not wanting to move just yet. Their combined breathing became the only sound in the tent, the nearby horses the only noise in the camp, as they sat for a while longer, lost for a spell in a strange new moment…a moment that required nothing more than this.”


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Comments more than welcome and appreciated!


Thank you!


C*
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"The room stank of semen and smoke and sweat and whiskey, of old carpet and sour hay, saddle leather, shit and cheap soap.  Ennis lay spread-eagled, spent and wet, breathing deep, still half tumescent, Jack blowing forceful cigarette clouds like whale spouts..." – Annie Proulx

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #64 on: March 08, 2007, 01:40:15 pm »
NEW   CHAPTER   POSTING

“Warmest Week of the Year” – Part  5  (Sequel to “Pine Creek”)


 :D :D :D :D

I know what I'll be reading tonight!

Thanks, C*
Marie
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #65 on: March 08, 2007, 02:27:26 pm »

 :D :D :D :D

I know what I'll be reading tonight!

Thanks, C*
Marie


;)   Happy reading, Marie.     :)

C*
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #66 on: March 09, 2007, 01:55:33 pm »
Cross-posting:  :)

Hi, C*!

.  .  . I was looking forward to reading this all day! As I was reading, I was noticing how distinct each of your chapters are from each other. It's like each one has it's own rhythm and tempo - but they all come together in a beautiful melody.

Ennis is such a deeply sensitive soul - he takes so much on his strong shoulders. I don't know what hurt me more - seeing Jack in such pain - or seeing Ennis watching Jack in such pain. But I was comforted by knowing that Ennis can soothe Jack, in fact ONLY Ennis can soothe Jack, as only Jack can soothe Ennis. This little moment:

“Thank you,” Jack persisted, whispering, leaning forward, laying his head on Ennis’ right shoulder, while letting his right hand come up to stroke Ennis’ left cheek. “Thank you, cowboy.” ...

was just exquisite in its tenderness.

You elevate their lovemaking- it just seems so right that it takes place outside - private and belonging only to them, but yet open and free. Closed off from the eyes of man, but open to the eyes of God and at one with the elements.

Loved the humor, as always! Now that's the way to bathe while camping! LOL!!! And I sure am glad we came full circle, back to Ennis's dream!

Thanks so much, C*!
Marie
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #67 on: March 09, 2007, 04:04:36 pm »
Cross-posting:  :)

Hi, C*!

.  .  . I was looking forward to reading this all day! As I was reading, I was noticing how distinct each of your chapters are from each other. It's like each one has it's own rhythm and tempo - but they all come together in a beautiful melody.

Ennis is such a deeply sensitive soul - he takes so much on his strong shoulders. I don't know what hurt me more - seeing Jack in such pain - or seeing Ennis watching Jack in such pain. But I was comforted by knowing that Ennis can soothe Jack, in fact ONLY Ennis can soothe Jack, as only Jack can soothe Ennis. This little moment:

“Thank you,” Jack persisted, whispering, leaning forward, laying his head on Ennis’ right shoulder, while letting his right hand come up to stroke Ennis’ left cheek. “Thank you, cowboy.” ...

was just exquisite in its tenderness.

You elevate their lovemaking- it just seems so right that it takes place outside - private and belonging only to them, but yet open and free. Closed off from the eyes of man, but open to the eyes of God and at one with the elements.

Loved the humor, as always! Now that's the way to bathe while camping! LOL!!! And I sure am glad we came full circle, back to Ennis's dream!

Thanks so much, C*!
Marie

Hi Marie,   :)

You've joined the ranks of the  "cross-posters,"  just like me.   lol    ;)

Thank you so much.
So glad you enjoyed this chapter.    :)
Writing the pain and the reaction to the pain was very palpable for me.
I was almost doubled-over and wincing through most of it.
I'm really glad Ennis' care and concern came through as strongly as I wanted it to.   :)

And as always, so glad you enjoyed the humor. 
Although I do wonder if there are any men reading my story who took offense to the "not needing any soap for just five days comment."   LOL    ;) 

Take care, sweetie.
See you next time.

C*   

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An Unexpected Update...
« Reply #68 on: March 13, 2007, 12:54:25 am »


Unexpected Update


I won’t be able to post Chapter 6 of “Warmest Week of the Year” this Thursday as previously planned.  I have run into a very unexpected
medical situation. 

I’ve had a very unusual day…waking up with double vision, passing out in the shower, and then spending seven hours in urgent care.  I’ve been diagnosed with VBI – Vertebro Basilar Insufficiency.   

I’ve attached a link below that explains it a little better than I can, but in short, something is compressing the three major arteries of the neck and head, suppressing blood flow, and cutting off oxygen to the brain.
 

http://www.surgerydoor.co.uk/medical_conditions/Indices/V/vertebrobasilar_insufficiency.htm


I’m home at the moment, but I’ve been scheduled for additional x-rays and blood work tomorrow, an MRI on Wednesday, and an MRA on Thursday.   Although the doctor is fairly certain of the diagnosis, at this point, I have absolutely no idea what is causing it. 

I have to keep this brief.  My vision is still so blurry; I can barely see my monitor. 

A quick but very heartfelt thank you, again, to everyone who has been reading my stories.  I have thoroughly enjoyed writing them, as well as receiving all the wonderful, insightful comments.  If I missed responding to anyone with Chapter 5, I promise I will do so as soon as I am able.  Chapter 6 will be posted just as soon as I am able to do so as well.  It is largely written at this point, so I’m hoping it won’t be long at all.  I’m certainly expecting a positive outcome and quick return.  I truly have no idea at this point what is causing this problem.   

Maria and Amber, I will email you both as soon as I am able.

And Janice, I told you once, that you didn’t have to worry about taking a chance on me, because once I start writing a story, the only way it wouldn’t be finished in a timely manner is if I had passed on.  Well, I’m still here.  Just going to be detained for a few days.  So sorry.   ;)

Thank you, everyone.  I’ll be back just as quick as I can.


Cristine   
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #69 on: March 13, 2007, 12:18:10 pm »
Oh, Cristine - how frightening for you.  I'm so sorry you're going through this, honey, and you know we'll be sending many prayers and good wishes your way!

How sweet of you to let us know.  Take care.

Hugs,
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #70 on: March 14, 2007, 05:38:07 am »
Cristine,

Thinking of you and sending healing energy...

Hugs,

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #71 on: March 29, 2007, 06:11:01 pm »


NEW   CHAPTER   POSTING


“Warmest Week of the Year” – Part  5B  (Sequel to “Pine Creek”)

Hello everyone.  Great big hugs and kisses to Leslie, Marie, Janice and absolutely everyone over on the ‘Drabblefest’ thread.   :-* :-* :-* :-* :-*

So sorry I couldn’t contact anyone sooner to let you know how I was doing. 
I was on a strict ‘no computer’ order from my doctor for two weeks. 
Today was the first day I could actually sit at my desk for any length of time. 
Missed you guys.    :-*


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/6079.html#cutid1 - Part 5B 
(Finally, Ennis' dream)   ;)


Comments more than welcome and appreciated!


Thank you!


Cristine


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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #72 on: March 29, 2007, 06:31:27 pm »
Cristine!!!   :) :)  :)

I'm so happy to see you, honey!!!  You've been on my mind and I hope you felt everyone's prayers and good vibes being sent your way!! I actually did some re-reads of some of your chapters last night - I was missing your story so much. 

You've been missed, too!

I know what I'll be reading later tonight! 

Wonderful to have you back.

Talk to ya soon!

Hugs,
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #73 on: March 29, 2007, 07:20:57 pm »
Cristine!!!   :) :)  :)

I'm so happy to see you, honey!!!  You've been on my mind and I hope you felt everyone's prayers and good vibes being sent your way!! I actually did some re-reads of some of your chapters last night - I was missing your story so much. 

You've been missed, too!

I know what I'll be reading later tonight! 

Wonderful to have you back.

Talk to ya soon!

Hugs,
Marie

Ahhh, Marie, it's so good to 'see' you.   :)
I have been feeling the love, even in my absence.
On-line friendships can be so warm and refreshing.

LOL   You mention 're-reads.'  So, I'm gonna mention something to you.   lol
I hope Part 5A was part of your 're-read' session,  ;)
because I changed it just a little. 
Maybe not enough to be noticeable to some,
but you're pretty detail oriented, as am I.     lol

I changed around several major paragraphs,
and added about another 500 words total to the piece. 
It really needed a tweak to work the way I wanted it to work
in conjunction with Part 5B.   

I realize now, after the fact, that I was already really sick when I posted 5A. 
My mind was a little fuzzy.  When I went back a few days later and re-read it, I cringed.  lol   

I think it flows better now overall...but then again,
because my chapters are so long, no one else may notice the difference. 
Just wanted to make sure you knew. 
You are such a sweetie.   :)

Cristine    :) 
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #74 on: March 29, 2007, 08:03:22 pm »
Hey Cristine!

Great to see you back online!  Hope all is well.
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #75 on: March 29, 2007, 09:27:18 pm »
.  .  .
LOL   You mention 're-reads.'  So, I'm gonna mention something to you.   lol
I hope Part 5A was part of your 're-read' session,  ;)
because I changed it just a little. 
Maybe not enough to be noticeable to some,
but you're pretty detail oriented, as am I.     lol
 . . .

Cristine, this is so funny!  I did re-read 5A - and I thought something seemed different - but I couldn't put my finger on exactly what and just thought I was misremembering.   It's wonderful, of course, but then I thought it always was - you couldn't possibly write anything that would be "cringe worthy!"  LOL! 

Now, on to 5B - (cross-posting again)  :) -

Wow, Just Wow. Where do I begin?

 “Hits it…just right…every time…” During my second read of this (yep, immediately following my first) I thought, "Well there's something C has in common with Ennis" - because you hit it just right every time, too! LOL!!

"Jack’s laugh fairly leapt from his body, wrapping Ennis in significant and considerable warmth, deeper and stronger than any coat or blanket could ever hope to provide, greater and finer than any dwelling place Ennis had ever known."

Love that. They are each other's safe havens.

"For unexpressed did not mean unknown." - That may be one of my favorite sentences in all BBM fanfic. A world of truth in six words.

And these phrases are so beautiful and real:

"Like therapy for his soul, Ennis couldn’t help but feel completely detached from worldly cares whenever he was stroking that head of hair."

". . .that smoky-eyed gaze of complete and total trust and surrender… Jack held on, tearing at Ennis’ chest with both hands, eyes gazing straight through to the man’s soul…"

Ahhh .... it's wonderful to be back in your heavenly realm, Cristine!

Do take care of yourself - you know we'll be happy to wait.   :-*

Thanks so much,
Marie


P.S. Ennis's four (or was it five?) "Well"'s . . - so sweet and funny - and so Ennis!
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #76 on: March 30, 2007, 04:47:41 am »
Cristine....

Glad to hear you are feeling better and glad to have you back. I missed you!

Hugs,

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #77 on: March 31, 2007, 08:24:59 pm »
Cristine....

Glad to hear you are feeling better and glad to have you back. I missed you!

Hugs,

Leslie

Thank you so much, Leslie.   :)
Missed you!

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #78 on: March 31, 2007, 08:29:13 pm »
Hey Cristine!

Great to see you back online!  Hope all is well.
 :-*

Amanda, 

Thank you so much!
I missed you guys.    :-*
I'm doing much better.
Just have to be smart and listen to the doctor.   ;)
Thanks, sweetie.

Cristine   :)
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #79 on: April 01, 2007, 07:47:28 pm »
Cristine, this is so funny!  I did re-read 5A - and I thought something seemed different - but I couldn't put my finger on exactly what and just thought I was misremembering.   It's wonderful, of course, but then I thought it always was - you couldn't possibly write anything that would be "cringe worthy!"  LOL! 

Now, on to 5B - (cross-posting again)  :) -

Wow, Just Wow. Where do I begin?

 “Hits it…just right…every time…” During my second read of this (yep, immediately following my first) I thought, "Well there's something C has in common with Ennis" - because you hit it just right every time, too! LOL!!

"Jack’s laugh fairly leapt from his body, wrapping Ennis in significant and considerable warmth, deeper and stronger than any coat or blanket could ever hope to provide, greater and finer than any dwelling place Ennis had ever known."

Love that. They are each other's safe havens.

"For unexpressed did not mean unknown." - That may be one of my favorite sentences in all BBM fanfic. A world of truth in six words.

And these phrases are so beautiful and real:

"Like therapy for his soul, Ennis couldn’t help but feel completely detached from worldly cares whenever he was stroking that head of hair."

". . .that smoky-eyed gaze of complete and total trust and surrender… Jack held on, tearing at Ennis’ chest with both hands, eyes gazing straight through to the man’s soul…"

Ahhh .... it's wonderful to be back in your heavenly realm, Cristine!

Do take care of yourself - you know we'll be happy to wait.   :-*

Thanks so much,
Marie


P.S. Ennis's four (or was it five?) "Well"'s . . - so sweet and funny - and so Ennis!



Marie,

Thank you so much!
I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter,
and you quoted all the 'sweet' parts. :)

I really loved writing that line about Ennis being detached
from worldy cares when stroking Jack's hair.
Somehow, I can really picture it being just that way. :)

And all Ennis' "Wells..."   lol   That was just so much fun to write.
I'm glad it came through the way I wanted it too.   :)

Thanks so much for reading, sweetie.

I'll pop over to the Drabblefest as soon as I can.

I've been trying to catch up on a myriad of 'life' things...some of them I just wish I could ignore and hope for them to go away.   ;)    LOL

Take care, sweetie. 

C* :)
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #80 on: April 06, 2007, 02:41:46 am »

NEW   CHAPTER   POSTING


“Warmest Week of the Year” – Part  6A  (Sequel to “Pine Creek”)


“Ennis smiled, pulling Jack closer to his chest, burying his face in the man’s hair yet again, but not before Jack caught the tail-end of Ennis’ expression, a tender-eyed look of raw warmth and undefined affection that shot straight to Jack’s heart, satisfying every inch of his body and soul.”


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/6256.html#cutid1


Comments more than welcome and appreciated!


Thank you!


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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #81 on: April 06, 2007, 12:59:59 pm »
NEW   CHAPTER   POSTING


“Warmest Week of the Year” – Part  6A  (Sequel to “Pine Creek”)


“Ennis smiled, pulling Jack closer to his chest, burying his face in the man’s hair yet again, but not before Jack caught the tail-end of Ennis’ expression, a tender-eyed look of raw warmth and undefined affection that shot straight to Jack’s heart, satisfying every inch of his body and soul.”


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/6256.html#cutid1


Comments more than welcome and appreciated!


Thank you!


C*

Already?  I hope you're not overdoing it, young lady!   :)  As always, looking forward to some late night reading!

Thanks!
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #82 on: April 07, 2007, 05:04:05 pm »
Already?  I hope you're not overdoing it, young lady!     As always, looking forward to some late night reading!

Thanks!
Marie

I'm doing well.   :)

So glad you enjoyed the chapter. 
Hope it didn't keep you up too late.   ;)   

C*
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Warmest Week of the Year - Part 6B
« Reply #83 on: April 12, 2007, 10:09:07 pm »


NEW   CHAPTER   POSTING


“Warmest Week of the Year” – Part  6B  (Sequel to “Pine Creek”)


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/6628.html#cutid1


Comments more than welcome and appreciated.


Thank you.    :)
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #84 on: April 13, 2007, 09:51:08 am »

NEW   CHAPTER   POSTING


“Warmest Week of the Year” – Part  6B  (Sequel to “Pine Creek”)


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/6628.html#cutid1


Comments more than welcome and appreciated.


Thank you.    :)



 :D

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #85 on: April 13, 2007, 12:30:53 pm »

 :D

Thanks, Cristine
Marie

You're welcome, sweetie.    :-*
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Warmest Week of the Year - Part 6C - 'Can't Sleep' - Drabble
« Reply #86 on: April 13, 2007, 06:34:03 pm »
Just a fun little follow-up drabble...cuz I was feelin' silly.    ;)     (45 Words)


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/6774.html#cutid1 - Part 6C


C*
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #87 on: April 19, 2007, 01:32:14 pm »


NEW   CHAPTER   POSTING


“Warmest Week of the Year” – Part  7A  (Sequel to “Pine Creek”)


“Back at camp, Ennis took Jack up on his offer, found the change of clothes in the smallest of the bags, and pulled out the extra shirt. He held it for a moment quietly, the soft flannel fabric feeling warm and inviting between his rough calloused fingers. It was blue and green, large-checked in pattern, and a little worn around the collar and cuffs. It was clean, and yet it smelled of Jack. Ennis breathed deeply for a moment, squeezing the collar lightly with both hands, just barely resisting the urge to bring the borrowed shirt to his face and hold it there for a moment or two, just to breathe in the lingering scent of his friend.”


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/6946.html#cutid1


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Thank you.


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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #88 on: April 19, 2007, 05:37:37 pm »
What a nice surprise - I get my fix a day early!  LOL!!!

Thanks,
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Re: Missing Motel Moments/Pine Creek/Warmest Week of the Year
« Reply #89 on: April 19, 2007, 08:13:11 pm »
What a nice surprise - I get my fix a day early!  LOL!!!

Thanks,
Marie

So happy to oblige.    :-* :-* :-*
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #90 on: April 19, 2007, 11:18:43 pm »
Thanks for the update Cristine!

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #91 on: April 19, 2007, 11:21:19 pm »
You're so welcome, Amanda!
Nice to 'see' you.   :)    :-*

Cristine  :)
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Warmest Week of the Year - Part 7B (Sequel to "Pine Creek")
« Reply #92 on: May 08, 2007, 05:16:38 am »


NEW   CHAPTER   POSTING


“Warmest Week of the Year” – Part  7B  (Sequel to “Pine Creek")


“The man tasted of loneliness and need, strength and fear, desire and denial. Ennis’ conflicting emotions were always so prevalent in his kiss, Jack tasting the pain and the agony right alongside the need and the joy. It was a palpable experience that brought Jack to his knees every single time they kissed, no matter if he was sitting or standing.”


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/7700.html#cutid1


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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #93 on: May 08, 2007, 07:30:27 am »

NEW   CHAPTER   POSTING

. . . .
“The man tasted of loneliness and need, strength and fear, desire and denial. Ennis’ conflicting emotions were always so prevalent in his kiss, Jack tasting the pain and the agony right alongside the need and the joy. It was a palpable experience that brought Jack to his knees every single time they kissed, no matter if he was sitting or standing.”  ..... 

God, this paragraph alone is awesome.  I'm so looking forward to this newest chapter . . . as always!  (Once I saw your drabble, I was hoping this wouldn't be far behind!  :) )

Thanks, Cristine
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm / WWotY - Part 7B
« Reply #94 on: May 08, 2007, 01:44:49 pm »
God, this paragraph alone is awesome.  I'm so looking forward to this newest chapter . . . as always!  (Once I saw your drabble, I was hoping this wouldn't be far behind!  :) )

Thanks, Cristine
Marie


Ah, thanks Marie.    :D

Right now, I wish I didn't have to do anything else but sit and write about our boys all day.    lol   Their love is so strong in my soul right now.  And the dialogue...well, you'll see in this chapter that Jack in particular has so much to say to me...just won't shut up.   ;)   hehehe

But all that other stuff that I have to do every day keeps gettin' in the way.  ;)    lol

Take care, sweetie.
Hope you enjoy the chapter.

Cristine    :)   
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #95 on: May 10, 2007, 05:43:54 pm »
HOLEEEEEEEE COW!!!
I'm just on part three of the motel part.
This is awesome.
Haunted, you are a VERY gifted writer.
The sex isn't gratuitous, it is so well balanced by their love.
I think it's an awsome read!!
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #96 on: May 10, 2007, 05:58:09 pm »
HOLEEEEEEEE COW!!!
I'm just on part three of the motel part.
This is awesome.
Haunted, you are a VERY gifted writer.
The sex isn't gratuitous, it is so well balanced by their love.
I think it's an awsome read!!

Hi there, loneleeb,    :)

Thank you so much!  You are so kind to let me know you're reading and enjoying my story.   :)

I wrote that one back in December, and it was my very first fanfic EVER, so I'm always a little surprised and very flattered to find out that more people are still finding it and enjoying it.   :)    Thanks so much.   Hope you enjoy the rest as well.
 
(Two people told me they had to lay down after reading Part 4.  LOL  ;) 
So I always feel like I should warn people in advance.  LOL  )   ;)

Thanks again,

'haunted'

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #97 on: May 11, 2007, 12:35:06 pm »
Hi there, loneleeb,    :)

Thank you so much!  You are so kind to let me know you're reading and enjoying my story.   :)

I wrote that one back in December, and it was my very first fanfic EVER, so I'm always a little surprised and very flattered to find out that more people are still finding it and enjoying it.   :)    Thanks so much.   Hope you enjoy the rest as well.
 
(Two people told me they had to lay down after reading Part 4.  LOL  ;) 
So I always feel like I should warn people in advance.  LOL  )   ;)

Thanks again,

'haunted'

C*
No , thank you!
It really is a beautiful story. :)
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #98 on: May 11, 2007, 01:11:32 pm »
No , thank you!
It really is a beautiful story. :)

 :-*   ;D
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Warmest Week of the Year - Part 7C
« Reply #99 on: May 15, 2007, 03:06:57 am »

NEW   CHAPTER   POSTING


“Warmest Week of the Year” – Part  7C  (Sequel to “Pine Creek”)


"During such moments, Jack was afraid to close his eyes, breathe too quickly, or think too hard…for if he did any of those things, he might miss something significant. Time with Ennis had a way of confusing his senses. Their days together were painfully finite, yet beautifully eternal at the same time…limited to so few risings and settings of the sun, and yet so continuously timeless in spirit."


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/8288.html#cutid1


Comments more than welcome and appreciated.


Thank you.   :)

C*




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Hello everyone,   :)

This is just a little drabble to follow Part 7C.


Warmest Week of the Year – Part  7D -  “Wrong Side” – (A ‘middle-of-the-night’ - Drabble

http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/8651.html#cutid1

Enjoy.   :)


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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #101 on: May 15, 2007, 06:13:42 pm »
Wow - a new chapter already and a little drabble?  Hope you're not overdoing - but I'm selfishly excited! 

Thanks, hon!  :-*

Marie 
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm/ WWotY - Part 7C & 7D
« Reply #102 on: May 15, 2007, 06:23:26 pm »
Wow - a new chapter already and a little drabble?  Hope you're not overdoing - but I'm selfishly excited! 

Thanks, hon!  :-*

Marie 

Hi sweetie.   :) 
Thanks so much!   

My writing schedule has gotten all turned around, what with missing a few weeks,
and then experiencing a mad rush of dialogue once I was able to write again.    ;) 
I guess I need to blame it on Jack.   ;)   lol 
Hope you enjoy. 
Thanks for being such a sweetie.   :)

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #103 on: May 17, 2007, 02:13:10 am »


“Favorite Part” – The Drabble that Lost the Coin Toss


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Hello everyone.  Happy Thursday.      :-*


Warmest Week of the Year - Part 8A - "Blame it on the Rain"


"Slowly pulling away from Jack’s lips, Ennis continued to gaze at the beautiful man stretched beneath him. Taking everything in, from the dark hair, to the deep eyes, to every inch of the receptive body, Ennis gazed on Jack with countless thoughts trapped in his struggling mind, destined to live a quiet life behind the thoughtful shadows of his dark reflective eyes. For all Ennis could do in that moment was smile…a small, yet revealing smile that spoke louder and said more than any words could ever express."


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/9179.html#cutid1


Enjoy.    :)     


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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm/Warmest Week of the Year
« Reply #105 on: May 25, 2007, 02:51:50 am »


Warmest Week of the Year - Part 8B - "Cuz a You" - Drabble


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/9337.html#cutid1


Enjoy.       :-*


C*
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #106 on: May 29, 2007, 08:35:20 pm »
Hey, Cristine -

Just got around to reading your reply on LJ this morning and  left you one in return.   LOL!  Yep, I sure did notice the "typo" - but by the time I finished reading and commenting - it slipped my mind again.  (They do say the mind is the first thing to go -  I'm gonna have to start making notes as I'm reading your chapters!   :laugh: )

Can't wait to see what treats you have in store for us next! 

xxxoooo
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm/Warmest Week of the Year
« Reply #107 on: May 29, 2007, 10:48:30 pm »
Hey, Cristine -

Just got around to reading your reply on LJ this morning and  left you one in return.   LOL!  Yep, I sure did notice the "typo" - but by the time I finished reading and commenting - it slipped my mind again.  (They do say the mind is the first thing to go -  I'm gonna have to start making notes as I'm reading your chapters!   :laugh: )

Can't wait to see what treats you have in store for us next! 

xxxoooo
Marie

Hi Marie!!!! 

I knew it!   I knew you'd spot it!    lol    ;)

But it's funny, I was actually thinking the very thing you just said...that by the time people are done with my chapters they've probably forgotten anything that stood out to them in the first half.  hehehe. 

It's so funny how are minds can have certain little mental blocks.  With me, it's definitely the man's moles.   LOL   

Twice now, when I've been writing about Ennis' attention to the moles under the ear, I've written 'Jake' instead of 'Jack.'    lol   ;)    I've always caught it and fixed it in the "Preview" section of my LJ, but this time, the third time it happened, I just let it go...for fun.   I was counting on you to spot it.   I knew you wouldn't let me down.    ;)   

Now, I'm just trying to decide whether or not I'm going to leave it that way for a while.    ;)   hehehe

Thanks, sweetie.
Take care.
Love ya,

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #108 on: May 29, 2007, 11:58:50 pm »

But it's funny, I was actually thinking the very thing you just said...that by the time people are done with my chapters they've probably forgotten anything that stood out to them in the first half.  hehehe.  

Nah - that's completely me!  You should see my office - those little yellow post-it notes are everywhere!  LOL!

. .  . the third time it happened, I just let it go...for fun.  

Hey, if it happened three times - looks like it was meant to be - why fight it!  ;)   :laugh:

 :-*
Marie

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #109 on: May 30, 2007, 12:04:09 am »
Nah - that's completely me!  You should see my office - those little yellow post-it notes are everywhere!  LOL!

Hey, if it happened three times - looks like it was meant to be - why fight it!  ;)   :laugh:

 :-*
Marie

 :-* :-* :-*   
Have a good evening, you lovely lady.    :)
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm/Warmest Week of the Year
« Reply #110 on: June 06, 2007, 03:19:45 pm »

Happy Wednesday Everyone!    :-*


Warmest Week of the Year – Part 9A (Sequel to “Pine Creek”)


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/9890.html#cutid1



Warmest Week of the Year - Part 9B - "August" - Drabble


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/10129.html#cutid1


Enjoy.     ;D

C*

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #111 on: June 06, 2007, 06:36:15 pm »
Woo Hoo!  You're unstoppable, woman!  (that's a very good thing, btw)  :D

Thanks! :-*
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm/Warmest Week of the Year
« Reply #112 on: June 06, 2007, 06:43:12 pm »
Woo Hoo!  You're unstoppable, woman!  (that's a very good thing, btw)  :D

Thanks! :-*
Marie

hehehe    ;D    :-*
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #113 on: June 16, 2007, 07:57:41 pm »


Warmest Week of the Year - Part 10A 


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Enjoy!     :-*
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #114 on: June 17, 2007, 08:23:45 pm »
I just made a date for myself for late tonight - with a glass (or two) of merlot and Part 10A!   Ahhh.....  can't wait.   :)

Thanks!
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #115 on: June 17, 2007, 09:59:05 pm »
I just made a date for myself for late tonight - with a glass (or two) of merlot and Part 10A!   Ahhh.....  can't wait.   :)

Thanks!
Marie

 :-* :-* :-*   
Better make it two glasses.    ;)   
8,600 words...and they don't leave the tent.  (Except to piss)    ;)    lol

This chapter warmed my heart to write.   
I love writing this particular scenario,   ::)
but I only include it once per story...makes it kind of special that way.    ;)
Enjoy.    :)
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #116 on: June 21, 2007, 09:30:13 pm »


Warmest Week of the Year - Part 10B


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/10794.html#cutid1


Enjoy.      :)


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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #117 on: June 22, 2007, 12:49:57 am »
Congrats Cristine! 

What a clever, clever twist in that chapter!  I'm sorry to see the story come to an end, but again congratulations on finishing.
:)
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #118 on: June 22, 2007, 10:51:32 am »
I got lots of Catchinup to do!
I just finised Pine Creek Recently.
I can only take it in small doses. Between Cristine's lovely writing and the Jack and Ennis thread I'm an emotional wreck! ;D
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #119 on: June 22, 2007, 12:01:27 pm »

Warmest Week of the Year - Part 10B


http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/10794.html#cutid1


Enjoy.      :)


C*


Oh, my . . .  the last chapter?  I'm going to have to stock up on merlot and kleenex before I start reading tonight . . .

 :-* :-*
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #120 on: June 22, 2007, 12:11:56 pm »
Oh, my . . .  the last chapter?  I'm going to have to stock up on merlot and kleenex before I start reading tonight . . .

 :-* :-*
Marie

Well, probably more merlot than kleenex.    ;)   lol
(...maybe just a couple kleenex...I'm told the epilogue really did it for a few folks.)
Love ya, sweetie.  Hope you enjoy it.   :)

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #121 on: June 22, 2007, 04:21:30 pm »
Congrats Cristine! 

What a clever, clever twist in that chapter!  I'm sorry to see the story come to an end, but again congratulations on finishing.
:)

Amanda,    :-*

Thanks so much, sweetie!    :-*
Glad you enjoyed the end. 
Thank you for reading along with me all these months.   :)

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #122 on: June 22, 2007, 04:28:29 pm »
I got lots of Catchinup to do!
I just finised Pine Creek Recently.
I can only take it in small doses. Between Cristine's lovely writing and the Jack and Ennis thread I'm an emotional wreck! ;D

Hi Loneleeb,    :)

Take your time.   ;)
WWotY isn't going anywhere.  ;)  lol 
It'll be there when you're ready to read it.

It's bittersweet to finish something that lengthy after 4 and 1/2 months. 
It feels so good and so right, and yet I miss them already too.  How silly is that.   lol   ;)

Thanks for reading. 
I really appreciate all the wonderful feedback you gave me on MMM and PC.    :-*

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #123 on: June 22, 2007, 07:15:52 pm »



        That was a totally awsome finish Christine.  You have given us all a surprise.       



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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #124 on: June 22, 2007, 07:59:20 pm »


        That was a totally awsome finish Christine.  You have given us all a surprise.       

 :-* :-* :-*{{{{{Janice}}}}} :-* :-* :-*

Thanks so much. 
So glad you enjoyed it.  :)

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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #125 on: June 22, 2007, 09:30:11 pm »
Heya Cristine,

That last chapter has stuck in my head all day today. 




**Warning possible hint of a spoiler follows:**

The "twist" that you include (what Ennis finds in the trees) really gave the story a true finality to me.  It sort of burst the bubble or brought everything crashing back into reality.  Honestly, I was very surprised to see that this would be the last chapter (somehow I had a feeling that this series that you started up could go on and on... filling in more details and gaps that exist throughout the whole long story/film.  But the "surprise" in the trees and the sweet finishing touch to this chapter really made for an effective conclusion.

So, do you really think you're done writing fic?  Or just done with this story?
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #126 on: June 22, 2007, 10:58:13 pm »
Heya Cristine,

That last chapter has stuck in my head all day today. 




**Warning possible hint of a spoiler follows:**

The "twist" that you include (what Ennis finds in the trees) really gave the story a true finality to me.  It sort of burst the bubble or brought everything crashing back into reality.  Honestly, I was very surprised to see that this would be the last chapter (somehow I had a feeling that this series that you started up could go on and on... filling in more details and gaps that exist throughout the whole long story/film.  But the "surprise" in the trees and the sweet finishing touch to this chapter really made for an effective conclusion.

So, do you really think you're done writing fic?  Or just done with this story?

Hi again, sweetie, 

For me, the "twist" was intended to be 100% a tribute to the readers; it wasn't about finality for me at all, because as I mentioned in my author's note, I wrote that final tent scene back in January.  I was just starting the story, so at that point, I wasn't feeling any sense of finality with my writing.  At that point, I felt like I could go on forever.   lol  (And a few of my chapters almost did)   lol    :)   

I got the idea for the end back when I was writing "Pine Creek" and 'Greatmtn' and several others said my descriptions were so vivid they felt like they were right there 'spying' on our boys.   hehehe   I just thought it was such an interesting and humorous notion, that I wanted to see if I could pull it off.   ;) 

But, for me, J & E  jumped right back into their canon world right quick, which is why I ended the story with the Addendum and the Epilogue.  

As far as more writing goes, well...lol.    It's only been 24 hours since I finished WWotY and I miss the guys already.   ;)   lol   So yeah,  I'll probably be writing some more.  In fact, I'm pretty darn sure of it.   I just need to take a break from such long chapters for a while. 

I feel so good and so emotionally complete right now.  I think I need to enjoy the feeling for a bit.  But as soon as I start missing the guys really bad...lol...then I'll probably write some one-shots and some drabbles to satisfy that need.   :) 
I know that will make Mariez65 really happy.    ;D

But to completely answer your question, even though I didn't plan it this way from the beginning, I think the way it worked out really did make for a nice trilogy that can stand as it is.   
I can see myself being happy writing one-shots and shorter pieces for quite some time.   :)

Thanks, Amanda.
I'm really glad the chapter made such an impression. 

Cristine   :)
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Re: Missing Motel Moments by haunted_by_bbm
« Reply #127 on: June 22, 2007, 11:11:00 pm »
Hey Christine,

I've thoroughly been engrossed in your very vivid and hot MMM and Pine Creek.  Just barely getting started with Warmest Week.  Keep 'em comin'!

Seriously I've been so impressed with the fluidity of the detail you've provided, it has been quite an emotional experience.  There have been nights I just couldn't stop reading!

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« Reply #128 on: June 22, 2007, 11:24:13 pm »
Hey Christine,

I've thoroughly been engrossed in your very vivid and hot MMM and Pine Creek.  Just barely getting started with Warmest Week.  Keep 'em comin'!

Seriously I've been so impressed with the fluidity of the detail you've provided, it has been quite an emotional experience.  There have been nights I just couldn't stop reading!

Hi Rodney,   :) 

Thank you so much! 
That is so nice to hear. 
I'm so glad you enjoyed both MMM and PC.   

Warmest Week is a bit of whopper.  LOL   It turned out to be quite a bit longer than I originally thought it would be, but the fellas just kept talkin' to me, so I kept writing it all down.    ;)   lol 

Thanks again.
I really enjoy the feedback.   :)

Cristine   :)   
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« Reply #129 on: June 25, 2007, 06:41:26 pm »



A little AU Drabble


Flannel - http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/11020.html#cutid1


Enjoy.     :-*
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« Reply #130 on: September 02, 2008, 10:07:44 am »
More news about their hotel scene...

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« Reply #131 on: August 03, 2014, 05:04:58 pm »
hi, I am posting to anyone who is still out there (slim chance seeing as there's been no activity on this thread for years but i'll try anyway) with a plea: can anyone please pretty please send me this story? i would love to read it but haunted-by-bbm livejournal no longer exists :( please help

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« Reply #132 on: August 04, 2014, 02:28:13 am »
hi, I am posting to anyone who is still out there (slim chance seeing as there's been no activity on this thread for years but i'll try anyway) with a plea: can anyone please pretty please send me this story? i would love to read it but haunted-by-bbm livejournal no longer exists :( please help


Sorry, I don 't have the story. But there are indeed still some people out here, so maybe someone else has it. Good luck.

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« Reply #133 on: August 04, 2014, 03:11:24 am »
I checked for haunted-by-BBM's livejournal and it's still there:

http://haunted-by-bbm.livejournal.com/7396.html

However, it is friends locked. Try and ask the author to friend you, maybe she still receives the emails and will do so.

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« Reply #134 on: August 04, 2014, 11:43:28 am »
I tried the link and copied it to a Word doc, if you'd like me to send it, post or PM your email address.
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« Reply #135 on: August 05, 2014, 12:55:12 pm »
I tried the link and copied it to a Word doc, if you'd like me to send it, post or PM your email address.

thank you very much, butlers_fantasy, you made my day!!! read it in one sitting and may I say ''not bad...not bad at all'' ;)
still, I think Ennis in this fic is more shortstory-like than movie-like. actually the only thing I found slightly unrealistic was his openness in talking about feelings and stuff...
the way I always imagined the 'missing motel scene' in the movie was all about wordless passion, them breathlessly throwing themselves in each other's arms and not saying a damn word about it. i don't know. what do you guys make of it? sorry, i've not read other replies in this thread yet, I might be reinventing the wheel here :)