Let's write a Brokeback limerick! (How-to in first post)

[Marina]

On Brokeback, they were as happy as can be
Unexpected, 'cause (said Annie P.)
Love was new and raw
And neither foresaw
A love that was deep as the sea.

[Andrew]

Now that that limerick has been so beautifully brought to its conclusion, I have a confession: My bizarre second line was introduced as part of a limerick going in a different direction, which no one else could have guessed.  It often happens when I see a first line that the whole rest of the poem comes at once, but the nature of this game is to contribute only one line at a time unless you are doing the whole limerick.

Given the lyrical direction it went in, I would like to propose a different second line than the one I put in:

On Brokeback, they were as happy as can be
Each night when light fell from the galaxy.
Love was new and raw
And neither foresaw
A love that was deep as the sea.

My original second line was a paradoxical play on the expression 'as happy as can be expected' and was going in this direction (which only I knew)

On Brokeback, they were as happy as can be
Unexpected, 'cause (said Annie P.)
Each found a friend
Where none had been
Expected.  Serendipity!

[Marina]

Oh, I love your version - it's funny, I often think of things in Brokeback terms.  I know all of you do too, as there is an entire thread devoted to it!   When I hear the words expected or unexpected, I sometimes think of that line "companionship where none had been expected". 

[Andrew]

I like the way limericks, which were originally always comic, can be bent to be serious or to be some original blend of comic and serious.

Since limericks do sometimes come to me as finished things, here is a two-limerick mini-story of the original whimsical kind, which requires no assembly:

There was a Tri Delt named Lashawn
Who could talk a blue streak until dawn
Her Randall lay near her
She thought he could hear her
But when she reached out he was gone!

     .....

"WHERE'D YOU GO at this hour?!" "Taylor's shack down there?
Just forgot that I had to go back down there.
I had looked in my truck
With the flat and said, Fuck!
Here I've gone and just left my one jack down there!"

 

[Sason]

They got their orders in Aguirre's trailer

[ifyoucantfixit]

They got their orders in Aguirre's trailer
Ennis to be cook, and Jack the sheep scaler

[Sason]

They got their orders in Aguirre's trailer
Ennis to be cook, and Jack the sheep scale
Glanced at each other

[SuperDistortion]

They got their orders in Aguirre's trailer
Ennis to be cook, and Jack the sheep scaler
Glanced at each other
And don't tell your mother

[Sason]

They got their orders in Aguirre's trailer
Ennis to be cook, and Jack the sheep scaler
Glanced at each other
And don't tell your mother
Or she will turn yet a shade paler

[southendmd]

There once was a rodeo queen,