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Author Topic: Let's write a Brokeback limerick! (How-to in first post)  (Read 3395403 times)

Offline Monika

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Re: Let's write a Brokeback limerick!
« Reply #4110 on: December 28, 2008, 08:54:04 pm »
Quote from: ifyoucantfixit on December 28, 2008, 08:51:40 pm



             I have tried where possible to keep the right amount of syllables
should I count syllables according to how a word is spelled or according to how it is pronounced?
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Re: Let's write a Brokeback limerick!
« Reply #4111 on: December 28, 2008, 08:56:22 pm »

this makes it seem as if Jack met himself?  Unless he was speaking of Lureen,,, so i'll go with that.




A young fella from Lightning Flat, WY
With a smile that could rouse the dying
ran into a Texan
with a right rich old man
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Re: Let's write a Brokeback limerick!
« Reply #4112 on: December 29, 2008, 05:55:14 am »
Quote from: buffymon on December 28, 2008, 08:54:04 pm
should I count syllables according to how a word is spelled or according to how it is pronounced?


Syllables are all about pronunciation.  When I wrote the first line, I pictured it sounding like, "A young fella from Lightning Flat, Why."  It's something I've seen in limericks before, pronouncing abbreviations as if they themselves were words to pronounce.  But I didn't explain it, oh well. 

(And by the way, I didn't mean for it to have the meaning of the word "why," just the sound.  It's tricky when the line we write is setting up for someone else to continue it.  A cooperative art form.)

Okay:


A young fella from Lightning Flat, WY
With a smile that could rouse the dying
ran into a Texan
with a right rich old man
And said, "I'll take you since I can't have a guy."


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Re: Let's write a Brokeback limerick! (How-to in first post)
« Reply #4113 on: December 29, 2008, 06:04:14 am »
I just added Chuck's description and example to the original post in this thread, so those of us who want to can look up the guidelines.


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Re: Let's write a Brokeback limerick! (How-to in first post)
« Reply #4114 on: December 30, 2008, 11:44:40 pm »




Jack and Ennis rode horseback for so long.
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Re: Let's write a Brokeback limerick! (How-to in first post)
« Reply #4115 on: January 02, 2009, 02:52:15 pm »
Jack and Ennis rode horseback for so long.
It made their thigh muscles amazingly strong         

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Re: Let's write a Brokeback limerick! (How-to in first post)
« Reply #4116 on: January 02, 2009, 04:19:27 pm »
Jack and Ennis rode horseback for so long.
It made their thigh muscles amazingly strong   
This both Alma and Lureen knew
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Re: Let's write a Brokeback limerick! (How-to in first post)
« Reply #4117 on: January 05, 2009, 02:08:42 pm »
Jack and Ennis rode horseback for so long.
It made their thigh muscles amazingly strong   
This both Alma and Lureen knew
Sadly, some things were not true
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Re: Let's write a Brokeback limerick! (How-to in first post)
« Reply #4118 on: January 05, 2009, 06:23:07 pm »
Jack and Ennis rode horseback for so long.
It made their thigh muscles amazingly strong   
This both Alma and Lureen knew
Sadly, some things were not true
Both men guilty of doing their wives wrong
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Re: Let's write a Brokeback limerick! (How-to in first post)
« Reply #4119 on: January 06, 2009, 12:05:47 am »



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