Louise asked me to go searching in the archives, and I managed to find the original essay by Ellery, with comments by Wes, in red pencil. I will share them with you here in hopes that it might make the revised essay turn up.
Ellery,
Good start. You have a few run on sentences and such, but I am not the grammar police. You can correct those on your own.
Glad you discovered Helga's bakery. You are correct, her muffins and pastries would be a welcome addition to the staff room. Maybe we can persuade Joe to switch. I'll mention it to him. I also might be able to persuade Edna to bake for us on Fridays. I know how fond you are of her biscuits.
But, to the heart of the matter. If you spent the week watching TV and eating Dampfnüdels (in between the conduct unbecoming, but I don't want to get into that!) then you must have had some time to think. And what you thought about is what I am interested in hearing. So, this is good start but revisions are needed. Have this back to me in three days.
Wes